The Kingly Mammal

by Linkzude16

Published September 8, 2014

E - Everyone

In Short Stories and Poems

Look how God has crowned him

With scorching orange flame.

Look at his majesty

And his acrobatic frame.

                                                                                                                                                        Gaze upon his glory--

The fiery striped coat

He so richly wears and

The white cloth on his throat.

                                                                                                                                                           Is God not personified

Somewhat in this mammal--

One He made so kingly,

So stately and regal?

                                                                                                                                                               This creature is different,

Like no other vertebrate.

God has created others,

But not one quite like it.

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Mysticalxx
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Mysticalxx wrote a review Review · Aug 11, 2015

This one was easy! I was thinking "lion" when I read the title, but you wrote "striped coat" in the poem, so it has to be either a tiger or a cat, doesn't it? :D Anyway, REALLY nice poem! I'm impressed by the fine imagery you've ysed, your expressions and the fine langauge being utliised in the poem. Thumbs up to ya! The beginning stanza is really good.

Keep it up!

Mysticalxx

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Mysticalxx commented Comment · Aug 11, 2015

This one was easy! I was thinking "lion" when I read the title, but you wrote "striped coat" in the poem, so it has to be either a tiger or a cat, doesn't it? :D Anyway, REALLY nice poem! I'm impressed by the fine imagery you've ysed, your expressions and the fine langauge being utliised in the poem. Thumbs up to ya! The beginning stanza is really good.

Keep it up!

Mysticalxx

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RubyRed
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RubyRed wrote a review Review · May 20, 2015

Hello Link! It's a me Nunya. I very much like this poem. I also think that this was very clever because not only did you make a rhythmic poem it rhymes and contains a riddle. So even though you have said what the riddle is about, I would have thought it was a tiger. I guess I was wrong it was a tabby. Anyways keep writing and NEVER get discouraged because,

"If we all did the things we are capable of doing, we would literally astound ourselves." -Thomas Edison :D :D

Ye be thanked. :D

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Vivian
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Vivian commented Comment · Sep 8, 2014

A lion or a giraffe. I don't know what a vertebrate is. :I

A vertebrate is a creature with a backbone. Any mammal is also a vertebrate. The one I wrote about is an orange tabby, hehe.

iheartluciencarr wrote a review Review · Sep 8, 2014

I really liked this! I'm going to assume you were referring to a Bengal tiger, for the sake of the rest of this review.
Tigers are truly beautiful creatures, and you captured that magnificently in this poem. I do agree with Rurouni, however, the word "God" is slightly overrused. I would suggest phrases such as the Creator, or something else to suggest to people not familiar with Christianity the idea you are trying to put forth. I also would have liked to see more abstract ides about the way he was made, such as God carefully painting each individual stripe.
But completely disregarding the fact that I'm critiqueing a poem I could never even come close to, great job!!!! I can't wait to see mroe from you!

Thanks much!

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Rurouni
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Rurouni wrote a review Review · Sep 8, 2014

Hi!


This is really cool! This is a short review, but I'm here anyways!


I like the use of God, but maybe its just... Too many times? Maybe "The Holy Ghost" or you know, other names. If not, hey, it still sounds good.

I'm guessing its a Tiger, bengal? I'm guessing tiger XD

This was fun!

Great work, keep it up!


Always~

~Rurouni

Yes, it's a cat. Tiger is probably the best interpretation, but I was actually referring to my orange tabby.

Rurouni replied · Sep 9, 2014

Ah XD. Cute poem noneless.

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GeeLyria
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GeeLyria wrote a review Review · Sep 8, 2014

Hi Linkzude. :)

Look how God has crowned him

With scorching orange flame.

I believe this is a lion. :)

I love your writing style, it is so simple and beautiful. I also like that you never mention what is it you're talking about, making your piece a poem-riddle. It's something I really would've enjoyed as a kid. Actually, I think it would be awesome if you were to make a whole collection of these kind of poems. I have a suggestion though... if I were you, I would try to make stanzas, because that would give your reader a space to breathe. But other than that, it's great.

Keep writing!

Thanks for your review. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I'll go add those stanzas.

Thanks for your review. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I'll go add those stanzas.

Okay, I mended it--it now has stanzas. :)

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Linkzude16
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Linkzude16 commented Comment · Sep 8, 2014

I apologize for my misuse of the colon. Oops.

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spottedkit
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spottedkit commented Comment · Sep 8, 2014

A caracal?

I don't know what that is, but no.

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DoodleNugget
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DoodleNugget commented Comment · Sep 8, 2014

Polar Bear?

TheUnknownWriter commented Comment · Sep 8, 2014

I like this poem :D
I think it's a tiger...

You have the closest guess. It's about an orange tabby cat; but it holds the exact same idea: now that I think about it. Good thinking.

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eleanor12 commented Comment · Sep 8, 2014

Is it a lion?

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Linkzude16
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Linkzude16 commented Comment · Sep 8, 2014

I keep making blank comments--my bad, hehe.



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