MaxZero1496

Awesome! Very good poem....its quite beautiful. I just have a few suggestions: 1. Line two, "I" should be capitalized. 2. Line four, "its" doesn't need an apostrophe. 3. Lines seven ...

Wow...awesome. Young poetic talent is something increasingly rare today, but you sure have it! Fantastic. Your rhythm is awesome, and the poem as a whole is very expressive, and provokes ...

Interesting viewpoint backed up with some good argument. However, I have a few points too: 1. By pushing kids out of their comfort zones, don't teachers help children learn what ...

Hey, good poem. It really portrays strong emotion, but we can't really understand exactly what your trying to get across. We don't know who he is, or the son, or ...

You make a good point about the folly of stereotyping teenagers, but you stereotype adults while your at it. Perhaps you could include counter-examples to the stereotypical behavior you believe ...

Really good article. I only have a few suggestions: 1. When your discussing the rumors surrounding this girl, one of them is "did she die?" Perhaps you could explain this ...

Good job. Really, I only have a few suggestions, ignore them if your don't like them. 1. 2nd stanza, line 3, is a bit choppy. It seems to disrupt the ...

Well, its very expressive. It conveys strong emotion, and the basic plot is clear: Hope in the midst of turmoil. A few more details, not so many that they take ...

What noma says is right. This poem has really powerful emotion. Really powerful. Of course, it would be easier to understand if it was broken into lines and stanzas, but ...

Really good. The first two stanza seems hopeless, but their is a lot of hope in the last two. Besides what Rosa pointed out below, I only have three suggestions: ...

Very good. Just a few suggestions.. 1. I needs to be capitalized a lot in your poem. 2. It would be easier to read broken into stanzas 3. More detail ...

Good. Now spelling errors, as far as I can see. Very well edited, and organized well. I especially like lines 4, 5, and 6. They have a nice beat, and ...

I like it. 1. The beat is nice and strong. 2. Your style is original, no line breaks. 3. No obvious spelling mistakes. 4. Conveys strong emotion. The line after ...

Not bad at all. Just a few suggestions: 1. Maybe be more conservative in your use of contractions? Sometimes it seemed to disrupt the flow of the verse. 2. Fourth ...

Good job. Here's a review: You did really job showing emotion about night. Each stanza presents a different story, and each one is never finished, leaving the reader to ponder ...