Young Writers Society

Really good. The first two stanza seems hopeless, but their is a lot of hope in the last two. Besides what Rosa pointed out below, I only have three suggestions:
1. Change "leave" to "leaving" in the first stanza
2. Capitalize the I in the second stanza
3. Insert "that" after light in the second stanza, second line.
This is a very well written, emotional poem. Great job!

Well written ... Although this

just like a thousand wishes of them.

Made me a little lost because I think there maybe a grammar mistake there.
I really don't care what your grammar looks like I look at content and literary devices.
Which reminds me I emenvely enjoyed the imagery in your peice.

My village now,
maybe too dark.
But the small stars there,
now looking so bright.
 
I can see alot of hope in this stanza, also the image of a dark sky with a bright diamond shining star.

Great poem, really liked the mood. However, I would have put in some commas or something to slow it down.

Great poem. Nice to read. The non-capitalized I was the only typo that I could see but other than that 4/5.

This is really nice to read. It flows well and I like your descriptions. The only thing that bugged me a little was the line "i only see the light comes out from the windows." You forgot to capitalize the i, which I don't mind so much since it was just a typo or something, but the flow seems a little off in the "light comes out from windows" part. Maybe you could say "the light THAT comes from the windows" or "the light COMING through the windows"? Just a suggestion though, if you want to keep it the way it is that's cool too. I'd give this a 4.5/5

I found the poem interesting to read as you described nightfall coming to the village. You broke up your stanzas very well so that the words flowed smoothly and kept the reader from becoming bored. The only grammatical error I can see is where you forgot to capitalize the letter I. Overall I give it a 4/5