Master_Yoda

Hello Kyllorac, I got all excited when I saw the title to this followed with a warning for mild language. I arrived, and felt only disappointment. This is not funny. ...

Hrmm, this is a very, very detailed character template. I think some of it is very valuable, and other parts of it are merely ways to procrastinate the actual writing. ...

Hey Fantasywolf and Zohali, This review is primarily a review on Zohali's review, but feel free to listen in, Fantasywolf as it may help you too. Let's begin, Zohali. I ...

Please, whatever you do, don't send this letter to the president. Even to me, a Republican and a strong supporter of Romney in the coming election, this letter is highly ...

Hello Artemis and Zohali93, As per Zohali's request, this is primarily a review on Zohali's review, but feel free to listen in, Artemis, as I hope it will help you ...

Hello StoryAddict, This could be an awesome story, but as it stands it is a mess If you have a pair of scissors handy, take them out, because to make ...

Hey Terra, Before I begin, let me give a disclaimer: I have not studied poetry at all, and the advice that I am about to offer is based on nothing ...

Hello Enigma, Here is my promised review. I am not sure if I simply overlooked a lot when I read the first version of this, but I feel like I ...

Hey Chevy, This story is a little all over the place. Its problems come down to lack of clarity both technically and with regards to your story itself. While you ...

Hi TazmaniaGirl, If you don't want criticism, the only bit of advice I can tell you is to keep your writing to yourself. If all you want from me is ...

Hey Yubbie, Here are my thoughts on this: If you were trying to write a picturesque scene, you lost to Tolkien, Le Guin, Dickens, and many other master wordsmiths long ...

Firstly, a suggestion: The sheer length of this would scare away many would be readers. I would suggest breaking it down and posting it in parts. Now, onto the substance: ...

Hokay, ED, I was going to tell you this in chat, but you left rather abruptly, so here is the feedback. 1. Cut out the first two sentences. You don't ...

Hey Dudette, Let's start by addressing your concerns: The balance between dialogue and description was good. Good job. Even before reading your author note I was going to comment on ...

Hello my friend, You have caught me at in a good mood. I am as of yet a little unsure about how that will impact your review, so let's find ...