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Re: "The Time That Will Never Change"
Hiya! Poems can have many different meanings, and can be construed in many different ways from person to person and from author to reader. Poetry has a way of relating ...
Feb 10, 2018 -
Re: Fear married my soul and I was not invited
Hey DivergentDemigod, (can I call you "Demi"? :D) The idea of this piece was really cool! I found the letter to be very thought provoking, and I particularly enjoyed that ...
Nov 2, 2016 -
Re: Tears? Cries? DUH! plz not in public.
Hello there! I take it you have never cried in public. :) I'm not sure that I can relate to the feelings expressed in this poem. Sure, when people I ...
Jul 22, 2016 -
Re: A Beautiful Day
Hi there! Having been in similar situations myself, I can relate to your work. In my case, anger went rampant, but eventually led to gross sobbing in a closet. As ...
Jul 13, 2016 -
Re: Remembering the Call
Hey BlueDaisy2018, and welcome to YWS! This was a pretty well written piece! In fact, I don't have much to critique, so I can pretty much only make suggestions. ;) ...
Sep 17, 2015 -
Re: Chapter 1/2 - Letters From Lisa
Hi Stegosaurus, and welcome to YWS! Let's get started, shall we? After reading the first few sentences, I started to imagine Lisa's voice reading it aloud. I really like the ...
Sep 17, 2015 -
Re: Robin Hood
I always love a good Robin Hood story, even if it sounds like all the others. But yours doesn't sound like all the others! There's something about changing the character's ...
May 31, 2015 -
Re: Elsa (Frozen) & Jack Frost Fanfiction Part 1
I'm really excited to read a story about these two! I'm not really a Jelsa fan, or any of that, but I've always wondered what it would be like when ...
May 31, 2015 -
Re: Satsugi Gemu
This was.... interesting. I noticed, first of all, that your piece had striking similarities to an anime called Sword Art Online. :D If you meant to do this, you should ...
Apr 24, 2015 -
Re: Marionette
Hi there, speakerskat! Your poem had a bit of a calming effect on me. Probably had something to do with the dreamlike quality and the pleasant imagery you used. :) ...
Apr 24, 2015 -
Re: Death
Seeing that you're new, I just want to say welcome to YWS!! I hope you like it here! I like the darkness in the first part of this poem. Not ...
Apr 21, 2015 -
Re: Irish Men
Hahaha..... I knew that was coming. ;) I really liked this a lot! I found it very funny. I also find myself slightly wondering if the obsession could perhaps be... ...
Feb 24, 2015 -
Re: Selective Beauty
So, I suppose that there are many things I could take out of this, but I'm gonna say that the main gist of it is this: People are capable of ...
Feb 23, 2015 -
Re: Bloody Screams of Murder in the Night
This was awesome!!!! I don't know if this was meant to be comical, but I noticed all detective cliches in here, even just in the first paragraph! (ex. dark, secluded ...
Dec 24, 2014 -
Re: The Last Seasons (Chapter 4 Continuation)
Alright! Andrew's section..... dark as always, and full of emotion. Some of which seemed to conflict, but that just proves what a complex and somewhat confusing character he is. So, ...
Dec 12, 2014
