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Re: Ruining the Constellations (Burning Out)
What's with the big middle paragraph? Not trying to be mean. :). " She says she wants to run away, wants to see the places she's never heard of. She ...
May 23, 2013 -
Re: Paper Mate
Heehee, hey it's me. x) Um it was a little weird 'cause in stanza one you never rhymed! :O. But who am I to talk? Haha. My rhyme scheme is ...
May 23, 2013 -
Re: Inquisitive
It was like a mini story which was cool, the punctuation and spelling may of been a bit out of place. For instance in the last stanza it was "So ...
May 23, 2013 -
Re: Timeless game
Oi, hello this is just LovexorxHatred! I thought the extra little words added were a sort of dramatic flair. And your title is just fine. I do believe though if ...
May 23, 2013 -
Re: Song For My Child
It had a queer air to it. Not in a bad way though. I found the lack of space between stanzas harder for me to flow with it. xD xoxo ...
May 23, 2013 -
Re: Bitter Tears Of Wine
Heh a lot about liquor. xD Nice job though. Your representations are very clear and the point is throughout the poem. Very well done! I felt it was a story, ...
May 22, 2013 -
Re: Birds of Freedom
A very well done poem. :) Not be a downer just a bit of repetition of the word mocking. :P But I love the birds you chose!!! Each one symbolizes ...
May 22, 2013 -
Re: fracture
Hi. I couldn't find the follow button. D:. Gah. But anyone this is deep. :) But I has such good intent. I can see the depression in your writing. Just ...
May 22, 2013 -
Re: crack.
The similes you used created a good sense of understanding. Do you love eggs? x3 Haha. Anyway I think it was really nice, and you may of made some grammar ...
May 22, 2013 -
Re: change
:( Yeah it is pretty messed up. To even be "attractive" change comes into place. How weird! Can we not be beautiful in our own ways. Or even just be ...
May 22, 2013 -
Re: The Pancake House
I think this elaborates on what we all have been thinking upon celebrities. A little lengthy but a good read! I like how you've incorporated a way to get the ...
May 22, 2013
