Young Writers Society

Hey!
Just to let you know, you can edit on yws, there will be a button to the right so you can correct your typos. However, you really should proofread before posting

I'm sure some people will nitpick about you not capitalising each line, which really bugs me. People used to always comment on my work saying "you need to capitalise this line." Well, actually, no I don't. Poetry is now free from all that annoying line and structure restraints. Just like how art has become all about freedom of expression, so has poetry!

There are a lot of questions (all rhetorical?) in this. Although, I understand that this is probably your intention as it is full of self doubt. However, it does get kind of confusing for the reader and you should probably decide if you are addressing this to someone or just to a universal reader. It creates uneasiness for us if so... not necessarily a bad thing but something you should commit to.

Looking forward to reading some more of your work.
Helen

Yeah it is pretty messed up. To even be "attractive" change comes into place. How weird! Can we not be beautiful in our own ways. Or even just be bland? Haha. Good poem very relate-able. I don't mean to be a buzz kill you just used some excess periods. <3 Just saying. But again thank you for putting a poem that I personally can relate to. Keep up the amazing poems! I'll be sure to follow you.

edit
"Sitting in quiet,
Wondering why must I change?

My hair, my eyes, every part of my body,
Just for you?

Change, such a strong word,
A word I never had to use,
Every piece of myself,
Disguised in something other than myself,

In that disguise, it will still be me,
Same eyess, same voice, same hair,
So why should I change?

I do not understand this word...
Is it love? Is it looks? Will it make you love me?

Change is something I never had to do,
Disguise myself? why? Just for you?

Change is a word that is unknown,
To those who never had to use it,
Or had anything to do with it.

So I remain sitting in quiet,
Thinking, why?
Why must i change??"

Sorry, TONS of gramatical errors...but I guess you knew that XD

I really loved it, it describes how I feel right now really well! I don't believe anyone should change just to try and make someone like them, though we all do it sometime or another probablly Xd I know I have and it ended BADLY! Loved the writing though, it was really good!

Keep it up
~Speakerskat