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*LIKED* This was very deep, there was one grammar mistake: gave should be give. I think you could explore the sleeping for money thing. Was it to help someone or ...

*LIKED* This was very deep. There were two points that could've been improved upon: All I see is Daddy on the floor Blood is spreading more Knife in his back ...

Heya, I didn't really read through this as I'm not going to review. I'll just say what I think gave you a lack of reviews. I think your main problem ...

*LIKED* Check below the title, it says Likes: 2. Second one from me, first is default. Well done you've coneyed this to me very well. One suggestion is that you ...

Heya! My name is TheNewHero, here to review. This poem was okay, dodgy, good topic. I can't pick out a tiny bit to nit-pick so I'll do the whole piece. ...

Heya, welcome to the society! I think Snoink in his all knowing piggyness, covered the nit-picks, so I'll just say one thing: Well Done. And yet another thing, I have ...

This was good, better read aloud than inside :D It's missing something. You've got all the points to make a good poem. But you missed perfection by a mark - ...

perdido says true :P *LIKED* HALF. You intrigued me in the beginning because I wish for so many re-do's I have an island of wishes. But you just told me ...

Hey Forest, This was a bit bulky. It takes a bit too much attention to understand it for a prologue. That's not necessarily bad, but it is with a prologue. ...

Hello, Hero here for a review. Okay, firstly: I'd italicize the Book's writing. At first (I haven't read the other chapters) I thought you were writing on Gia and trust ...

'Ello once again! TheNewHero here for a review. *Fergie voice* Let's get it started... --- Woah! Shakey beginning! Two mistakes too many as well. I dressed into dry clothes and ...

Okay, your story is moving along pretty quickly and take pride in the fact you're not stalling. Well done on this chapter, except for a shaky beginning (More on that ...

Ditto what the previous reviewers said. They missed one thing though: It is true too, today is the day that my evil father is moving my brother, Shane, and I ...

'ey there! NewHero here. This sounds like a vent and I'm not sure if that works with lyrics because mostly that has melody and rythym. Now I'm no expert but ...

Ditto to what perdido said without the crappy bit :P What you've mainly done is just asked a question. What will I carry after this? What will I carry on ...