LilPWilly

Oof Well put my good sir🤝 Ma'am, whatever I love the visual, so clear, of taking the shoe box down, and putting them on in the tall mirror, which I ...

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👏👏👏me gusta. I didn’t see it coming I like the idea, I like the comedy, it’s not really forced, so it kind of leaves you hanging at the set up, ...

Beautiful! There’s a single typo in this chapter, and also in chapter two. I should mention that when you are using dashes for asides-like this-it should actually be a double ...

Oof hit me hard with the last line. It’s so true. On first read I was thrown off by the ABA, rhyme scheme, and the inconsistent rhythm, but now... There's ...

This is fantastically confusing. I like how your brain works, your writing is relatable in a way that most writers (including myself) on this site can’t capture. Again, I love ...

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I’m with you on this one. I like the repetition, it’s hardly noticeable at first, like obviously there’s a few lines repeated, but I didn’t realize that every line is ...

This is fantastic. I love your tone, it obviously comes from a culture I haven’t been a part of. Either that or you perfectly constructed a brand new culture, or ...

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First reaction: oof this is long Second reaction: dang that’s a gripping introduction ... Third: crap I need to go to class Your grammar is excellent, but I would mix ...

This is the saddest thing ever—it reminds me of inception. I really hope this isn't a true story, and I hope you won! This is really beautiful. A few edits: ...

I don’t believe you lol I think this is probably about someone but idc Although, I should tell you to go for it if you can, don’t end up regretting ...

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Oof Loss. Shame and fear. How can I endure it? Who am I? I am a better person, I am not as sad, But this still feels impossible. My coach ...

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I don't think this should be controversial. What people don’t understand is that faith can turn to something more certain and inexplicable than what most people consider knowledge. This post ...

I don’t have the words! The ironic description of creativity is on point, and remarking on its imperfection is so beautiful to me. My interpretation, I guess?: creativity comes in ...

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“Addiction- this word was eating me up” Such a good line loll I guess addictions are bad. Just cause they control you. Scratch that, addictions are terrible. Empty rewards turn ...

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I’m prolly jus dumb but I dint get that this was metaphor. Idk So ya I would just say make the metaphor apparent, maybe like this: The column of wind ...