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Three

by vanillavelvet13


(This is a poem that's actually one that's dear to
my heart in a really good way, Trust me. XD
Alissa is a character of said poem, it isn't related to
any real person in real life.
And as usual, I really would appreciate
comments and reviews on my work!
It's always welcome!! Happy reading!! xoxo)

Three

One, I was scared, I was afraid to fall in love

Call me insane, call me crazy

But I was not one to fall in love so easily

Maybe, it wasn’t that expected at all

~~

Count to three, make me ache

My heart can’t take a lot

I breathe, you take my breath away

That smile, that laugh, those eyes

~~

Two, I regret talking to you

Now every night I’m thinking of you

I don’t want this kind of thing anymore

I just want what’s best for both of us

~~

Love might be good, but so is freedom

We might go to war if we’re not at peace or friendly

I know to myself I don’t ever want to argue with you

But you look so good I’d risk it all

~~

Maybe someday we can get together

But right now really isn’t the time

I do want us to be together

But there’s a wall forcing us to part.

~~

“Alissa, Alissa!” You call out my name

But I’m just in front of you, I can hear it

I’m trying to ignore every tone you use

Just because I don’t want you getting hurt

~~

The fault I have made, the one I most regret

I’m falling in love with you, can’t you see?

I just wish I was yours to hold and talk to

But I can’t and I’m close to crying my heart out

~~

Thre— maybe that’s what I want

maybe its what I need

But how am I so sure I’m the one you want?

Am I even the one you need at all?

~~

Chirping birds in the morning

Playing games together at night

You get pissed at me for ignoring my sleep

And you get disappointed in yourself for letting me not sleep at all

~~

skips, hops I come to you

I want you, I want you so bad

But I have to abstain myself

Because if I can’t, I’ll lose you too...

(This is the second poem of which I rewrote and refurnished.
This was originally a song and I turned it into a poem
because it felt more better and personal and dear in this form.
Thank you for reading~~)

ONE

Take my words,
For granted like you did me
I thought love were rainbows and chirping birds
Then I was locked in a cage trying to flee

I never did no harm,
Until you worked me on until I did
Wondering if the seed we planted made u grow a farm
Yet everything enjoyable for me, you forbid

Cast a spell, blind me of your actions
Maybe make me grow, feel like everyone has something I lack
I was locked inside, only you and isolation
I liked it at the start, now I want my freedom back

What even is the truth of love
If only we know the ugly truth behind it
It doesn’t always end with freeing doves
It isn’t happy ever after, sometimes you've got to throw a fit

Get what you want, lose what you have
Keep your priorities in check
Be happy, go out and have a laugh
Don't leave or be left looking like a wreck


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Mon Mar 29, 2021 3:51 am
RennisanceBlade says...



Eru Illuvitar, you Son of a Balrog!! You are really good with words. I mean really, really good! I wish I was half as good at this as you... But, ahem, on to the review. I think that if you added a bit more punctuation that this would be a really good piece. Anyway, thanks! Have a good day.
~ RennissanceBlade




vanillavelvet13 says...


Thank you so much!! i think you're really good with words too don't worry!! <<3333



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Sun Mar 21, 2021 9:48 pm
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LilPWilly wrote a review...



I don’t believe you lol I think this is probably about someone but idc
Although, I should tell you to go for it if you can, don’t end up regretting losing her like me, because I didn’t make a move.
The second one is my favorite, it’s actually really good. I’m a songwriter, so I’ll share my edits in song form.


Take my words
For granted like you did me
I’m a Beauty and you’re a Beast
But this doesn’t end like Disney

I never did anybody harm,
But thanks to you I couldn’t help it
Our love’s a seed but you grew a farm
Then why is what I want ‘selfish’

You cursed my eyes, blind me of your actions
Had me locked inside, with you and isolation
You tore on my heart, cause everyone has something I lack
I liked you at the start, but now I want my freedom back

What even is the truth of love
If it always turns ugly
I just want to hold someone
But not if they don’t love me

Get what you want, lose what you have
Make sure to keep your priorities in check
Choose to be happy, go and have a laugh
Don't leave or be left looking like a wreck

I hope this retains the spirit of what you were trying to say. I think I might’ve gone a little overboard loll




vanillavelvet13 says...


Yeah! Thank you for your review!! You've captured what I'm trying to say perfectly!! Thank you so much!! <33



LilPWilly says...


Glad I could help!



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Sun Mar 21, 2021 3:35 pm
HJYoung wrote a review...



Bravo! I like it. You used a lot of descriptive metaphors, like 'wondering if the seed we planted made u grow a farm', This is about a person falling out of love?? I really dont understand as I am not good at reading poetry. Was the 'u' purposeful? No big grammatical errors, or spelling errors, for that matter, a great and descriptive metaphoric text with a lot of great rhymes(rhymes are hard to do in poems), and a excellent poem overall. 9/10 please make more poems!




vanillavelvet13 says...


Thank you!! I think I forgot to change 'u' to 'you' LOL you have a great eye at catching! Thank you!! <3~~



HJYoung says...


Lol ty!




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