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Re: And Death said to Life
That was the cleverest poem I've read in a while. Such an exquisite idea! To treat life as a person and death as another, well that's how I understood it ...
Jul 21, 2013 -
Re: Pain
Hey! I liked the concept, love is always fun to mess with in writing. Your structure is spot on, and I knew it would be because of what you mentioned ...
Jul 19, 2013 -
Re: Brain Tumor
This poem had excellent rhythm to it and a nice personal touch, It's always helpful when you can draw from inspiration, although in this particular case it is terrible. I'll ...
Jul 18, 2013 -
Re: [deleted]
This reminds me of a woman who is suffering from postnatal depression. I like how the face of the song or poem appears simple, but once you really look at ...
Jul 18, 2013 -
Re: Love is like a wreckless rollercoaster
Nice work, love the analogies you used. I have to disagree with you about Taylor Swift though, I don't think she is that poetic haha. But that is just my ...
Jul 14, 2013 -
Re: Army of Justice
Hey, I like this, it seems you have designed a new type of poem; an essay-poem! And that is OK I guess, it's always good to invent new things. I ...
Jul 13, 2013 -
Re: Stephanie Fall
Hi, This is a good story, but it could've been a lot better. I fin the second point of view storytelling quite confusing and also, the first part of the ...
Jul 13, 2013 -
Re: You look like gold to me
This is undoubtedly the most brilliant poem I have read so far on this website. I am truly touched by the delicate words and metaphors you incorporated into this poem. ...
Jul 13, 2013 -
Re: The Feeling I Felt
Hi, this poem of yours sums up realising you have feelings for someone close to you, really well. Reading this made me feel as if I was being punched in ...
Jul 12, 2013 -
Re: The GR-8 Discovery- Prologue
I was immediately engaged into your prologue. I cannot wait to read what else you have in store for us! I love the mystery in this prologue, you keep us ...
Jul 11, 2013 -
Re: Whats Inside Your Head
How annoying it is to not know what someone close to you i thinking! Well sometimes anyway, haha. Firstly, I'd like to commend you on how you repeat the first ...
Jul 11, 2013 -
Re: Counting Questions
This was a good poem, I liked how you were drilling the audience with the question " Why did you open my diary?" over and over. It added a bit ...
Jul 11, 2013 -
Re: Fiasco
Hi, this is a good story, but there are quite a few grammatical mistakes which are frustrating and distracting. I don't know if you prove read this, but if you ...
Jul 11, 2013 -
Re: Hell of a time
Wow. This is a highly tragic piece, but a fairly realistic account of what domestic violence may bring, in the most extreme cases. You captured the pain that abuse can ...
Jul 11, 2013 -
Re: THE WIND OF CHANGE
This is really well written, but it's not a short story. It's a poem! But that aside, it's a good poem which expresses the need for change really well, but ...
Jul 11, 2013
