LadySpark

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! I'm Spark :) I'll be reviewing you today! Let's dance! Just for future reference, on YWS we don't really like things like centered poetry. It ...

Let's dance, darlin. The topic you've chosen to write about doesn't fit with the way you're writing it. All this street slang and informal language does not fit the story ...

Okay I really like this and I kind of want it every where so it's going to be stuck in Favorite YWS poems for safe keeping, yeah? But, first, let's ...

Ah, Neville and Luna not ending up together was one of the biggest disappointments for me. But, let's dance, darlin'. Once I heard the deep, steady breathing of the other ...

Since I've not read part one, I'm just going to give a general critque for just this chapter. let's dance, darlin'. As you expect, you'd* The following conversation between Chad, ...

let's tango darling. starting out strong with line one of stanza i. i love the concept of pieces of someone being trapped under someone else finger nails. but line two.... ...

Let's dance. Okay, so I like the topic you chose. But I don't like the way you presented it to us. It's too telly and there's just nothing there. It's ...

Let's dance, darling. I don't like the repeativiness of tap-tap-tapping, lub-dub-dub. Nor do I like the brackets and then parentheses switches. While I usually chose brackets, it's a personal choice ...

Hey there! Let's dance, darling. First off, I just want to let you know-- inside literary works, you do not have to censor your work. As long as you rate ...

Hello! I'm back to review you again! Let's dance, darling. Your first line is all by itself and it's the only line in the entire poem that gets a stanza ...

You should write from a male perspective more often. I would stop with the "~"'s. They're not needed, they interrupt it, they're just decoration that makes your poem look tacky. ...

Hey there! I'm here to review, even though I'm not sure how much of a review I can give on a piece so short. First off, if you want to ...

Hey there! Since you reviewed me, I thought I'd review you back to return the favor :) So let's dance, baby. First thing I notice is that this is one ...

Hey babe. The rhyme scheme is compromsing your poem. There's a lot of words that could replace "case, face, tune, moon" that would work better and be less cliche if ...

Oh wow... this might be one of my favorite Lumi-poems. I've only got a couple of nitpicks. 1. the title things. They don't really fit into the theme of the ...