LadySpark

Hello there! I had to save myself , This should be a period, not a comma. Don't wanna have a run-on sentence! I wouldn't die for anyone even if it ...

Helllooo! Time,>>I feel like something is missing here. Like an 'is'?

Hi sweetie reviewing you for the third time tonight. That first day, glancing across the chairs , I looked at you , and you looked at me . >>I couldn't ...

HI Taccksssssss. Maya's fingers hesitated over the shining black keys on her laptop. She ran her fingers through her choppy blonde hair and clicked the button reading, "upload photo". Quickly ...

Hello dear! Here as requested! Well... This is a very interesting take on Cinderella. But let's save that for later. The servant girl from the house of Marien had been ...

Hi Tacks! So the first thing I noticed, was the fact that this is all blue. I'm sure you didn't mean it that way, but it's kind of distracting, and ...

Hi there! Sparkles here to review! :) Right off, I see that you have a really nice rhythm. It was perfectly paced in my head, and I'm really impressed. There ...

Hello, dear! Here to review :) Bethlehem was very busy that one night but Mary had one of her biggest frights the baby was com ming , but where would ...

Hello Tenyo dear! Fantastic poem. So utterly perfect. The rhythm was perfectly on beat. And... Yeah. Just perfect. One little nitpick though- I’m scene the you've been waiting for all ...

Hello dear! Here to review! Sorry it took me so long... Life got in the way. The crunch of my heart was almost audible, like a kosher pickle under a ...

Hello my dear. Sorry it's taken so long for me to get to reviews. Life gets in the way sometimes... :) Because when the weather’s happy i.e. when the sun’s ...

Hello Dear! Here as requested! :) "Not very great, M other," This story has struck me as a rather medieval story. And saying the word great doesn't really fit. Not ...

Heeeellooo! I'm Sparkie, and I'll be reviewing you today! Let's talk about punctuation, shall we? You've got a good start on learning how to use it in poetry-- a very ...

Dannnggg. This was good. It's so foreboding and it kind of makes your skin crawl. It reminds me of all those things your parents warn you about when you're little, ...

Hi there, ity! I'm Drama, and I haven't reviewed in FOREVER, so pardon me if I'm just a little rusty. Okay. We'll start with what jumped out at me INSTANTLY ...