LMJRayner

You have a nice concept, somethings killing the animals and even the predators are scared of it. You do have a few grammar issues that I'm sure you'll iron out, ...

This was actually quite fun to read. The quantity of rhyme throughout set the pace. I think keeping this rhythm is very important for poems like this. And some bits ...

This was very unique, it felt very organic as if you were watching this all happen in front of your eyes. My favourite line is :- "One thing comes careening ...

Very relateable, the idea of her smile completely engulfing you and bringing you into her world was really good. Becoming intoxicated by her. The last two lines are brilliant as ...

Very well described, it gave a very stylistic image in my head about the deer and the huntsman, almost like a cartoon. This line :- "her each step a brush ...

I really liked this poem, the words were all perfectly in place, the rhymes didn't seem forced which you see in a lot of poetry. The third stansa I liked ...

I agree with the review below this, the style and nature of the words used, really read well as a poem, the lines :- "And that’s okay. I probably would ...

Very heart felt and it shows in the writing, the ending was really strong as well :- "My daughter , Audrey , which means strength , had finally found peace ...

I liked it a lot, the characters came across very realistic and natural which is paramount when writing characters. I liked the way the whole thing was very meta, the ...

With the title 'A Suicidal Girl' you can guess what the poem entails. It's quite vivid, the description is focused on the blood and the red. I think that is ...

The rhymes were very consistent throughout, maybe a slight edit to some of them. "As he nears the wilderness, thoughts of worry melt away, for he senses that something is ...

I think it's brilliant, the use of the crossed out lines really make this poem stand out. I like the way most of the conversation is between the main character ...

I really like the use of language in this poem, the repetition of I see you is really pronounced. I really like the line 'Standing on the Delta' I think ...

It was interesting, a brief period in someones life that echoes so much emotion. I think however it would have been better to hold off before Alex sees the initials ...

This feels like a monologue, you are tripping over your own words as you speak because there's passion there and I like it like that. There is a theme throughout ...