​I see you

Lovely! I am enchanted by the idea in the opening of this poem: a delta being compared to a mother. You know, when I rationally think about it, the river gives more life than the delta, since the delta unloads all its useable, drinkable water into the salty sea, but I don't even care, 'cause I get with your image of the unloading: it feels strong and right.

That said, I'm not sure I get the idea of the direct address. I don't know who this poem is talking to, and I wonder how much different it would be if instead of seeing "you", you just named who you saw. Would it be really cringeworthy? Do you hate that idea? Why?

Of course, maybe I've been focusing on the delta too much. I feel like in my heart, I want it to be the main topic -- the main movement for the emotion, but you do go on and give similarly sized stanzas to other images and topics, so maybe I missed it. I wonder if this is just about Egypt in general, not about the idea of a delta. I do like the concrete images you bring into the other sections. I don't think there's anything remarkable in this poem aside from the mother reference, but there's nothing shockingly bad, either. If you wanted to edit and improve, I'd suggest an attempt to bring out emotion and get the reader connect to your poem so they can't forget it. Right now, it feels like I'll read it, enjoy the images, and then move on. Is that all you wanted? If so, then you've done it! Haha, but if you want a reader to remember it and pass it on, get them engaged. Give them a hook and don't let them go -- maybe naming this person (maybe just at the end) will bring out that emotion? I dunno~ Play with your poem!

PM me if you have any questions or comments about my review, please.
Good luck and keep writing!

*Every breath you take
Every move you make
Every bond you break
Every step you take
I'll be watching you*
Haha, reminded me of that song *stalker*

All jokes aside, this is a fantastic piece. The imagery is fantastic! I would list examples of what imagery was exceptionally well described, but there is a word limit on this Poetry must never be ranked, but this is definitely Professional.
I lost myself at a certain point, and I felt like I was living between those lines.

The only minor criticism is the lack of rhythm. It makes the average mind tired, bored and not willing to carry on reading. But that wasn't even noticed in your poem since the words were alluring enough.

Definitely one of the best that I have read!
Fantastic

-K.

I really like the use of language in this poem, the repetition of I see you is really pronounced. I really like the line 'Standing on the Delta' I think this line in itself could have been repeated throughout the poem.

I think the last line needs to be stronger, 'That announces your Omnipresence' it read a little disjointed and threw off the flow.

Hope this helps,

LMJ

I had to read this a second time to get a feeling that what you see is something bigger and more beautiful at work. While I normally enjoy the darker, more grim side of emotion and poetry, this feels deeper than most I have read, and I like that. There appears to be something great and divine in even the simplest of moments, and this piece really shows that. Normally, I would maybe offer a suggestion or bit of personal insight to see if it would help in the creation of something more, but I have a feeling you know exactly what you want to portray. I hope to see more of this kind of work in the future, thank you for sharing.