Kaylyn

This has potential. Your writing style really flows. The only thing I would suggest is breaking it up into paragraphs and taking the quotations out around the phrase 'The dreams ...

Loved the first three lines of the poem, they flow very nocely and fit together quite well. The imagery I get from this is intriguing as well. I also thought ...

As other have said, there are many adjectives; HOWEVER, I think this is the case just for the beginning paragraph of the prologue. I get the details are vague because ...

Late at night when the world is sleeping Theres all sorts of creeping, peeping Theres needs to be correctly grammatically. Also, there is all sorts of creeping, peeping what? Grinning, ...

KatTrain, This poem was pretty good. The rhythm was great, and your wording was beautiful. The only thing that I think that you could add to improve upon it would ...

I'm sweet I can even be used as a Valentine sweet Ok, maybe you should find another word for sweet to use interchangably. You don't want to use one word ...

First of all I applaud you on Haikus, I can never get the hang of those. :) The second one seemed a bit cliche to me, like I've heard it ...

Good poem, altohugh let me suggest some changes. You could do without the ; behind every single line. You don't need that there. Also it seems as though your last ...

I love the imagery you used throughout this poem. It was very interesting, however, I think that you could cut down on the use of pronouns (he, she, they, etc.) ...

Powerful poem. Powerful words. I like how you used words to convey such powerful emotions across. Your very talented. I like your last line as well as your first. However ...

Alright then here goes. *cracks knuckles* I would suggest that you shorten the second line, Take a word or two out of that sentance. Its messing with the flow of ...

If you want to call this a poem I think that you need more structure and a more steady beat, or rhythm. I think that you should break up the ...

First off, I think that this beginning is a bit cliche. There are so many stories that begin like this. I would suggest that you put more original thought into ...

Okay, *cracks knuckles* Its been a while since I've done a review, but here I go: I found that some of your lines are to wordy, such as the third ...

No time was right, but no time was truly wrong, I tried so hard, to comprehend why... I had waited so long, The time was close, yet somehow a bit ...