Even the tallest Mountains crumble
Beneath the travelers feet
even the largest rivers tumble
Into the ocean deep
Even winter melts to spring
When you've given up your hope
The flowers bloom and sing
quiting their awful mope
every story has its ending
Whether good or bad it be
but its always worth pretending
of that we cannot see
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Good poem, altohugh let me suggest some changes. You could do without the ; behind every single line. You don't need that there. Also it seems as though your last stanza is forced. Your others are good, its just as though you grew tired of your poems and just wanted to end it. Spend a little more time with it, and it'll be great. Love the message of the poem though. Good luck with your writing, and keep it up!
~Kaylyn
Hi
This poem I guess follows the theme of the human spirit and does that with clear examples.
Even the tallest Mountains crumble;
Beneath the travelers feet;
A magnified image of the strength of human spirit.Very powerful and motivational imagery.Nice way to put across the message that even a seemingly very powerful obstacle can meet its match.Great way of showing courage.
even the largest rivers tumble;
Into the ocean deep;
The very same effective message,again with good imagery.
Even winter melts to spring;
When you've given up your hope;
A good way to bring about the message of hope, but, this is a quite common example used.See i its possible to use some other example if possible.
quiting their awful mope;
This line seemed a little forced.
but its always worth pretending;
of that we cannot see;
This is the very confusing part.What exactly was the pretense and what was it that we do not see....inspiration,courage,..the lines hear were not as clear as the ones before.
Overall,this was a thought evoking poem.
Continue to keep up the good work.