Kaia

Beautiful descriptions here. You definitely hit on the emotional stress of living a double life-a beautiful actress for everyone to watch and marvel at and also a abandoned mother. Yet, ...

Interesting. I love how disappointed Rei is when he realizes that the police didn't find his other victims. And now he has to prove that he's killed so many more ...

You definitely gave this some thought. Rei becomes an interesting character within a few lines of your writing. He's obviously evil and interested in revenge and murder. He seems to ...

Ant attack! I love it! There's an ant problem where I live, and I know just what your talking about. I like how you blend the annoyance of having the ...

I like this a lot. :) The contrast between the two scenes is stellar. With the first scene, you really put in some vivid description. As a reader, I could ...

Sounds like you've been through some rough spots! I like this quick poem...especially how relatable it is. I think everyone knows what it's like to be the friend of someone ...

First off, fantastic beginning! You get right into the action, something even experienced writers struggle with. However, I have a LOT of suggestions, so hang in tight. Some of these ...

Wow. This is really good. As a writer myself, I struggle with criticism. This really conveys that disgust you feel when you spill out your life in your writing and ...

"An unwanted pregnancy but not an unwanted child." I read something along those lines in a book by a woman who had an unwanted pregnancy. You have been through an ...

I feel like there's just a little less description in this one. Place description is good, but again, I feel physical description is a little lacking. At least I would ...

Glancing over the comments tells me that fellow readers do not like that you did not give a lot of detail about Emily. I, however, like that you kept those ...