Justagirl

Wow. That was wonderfully descriptive and I really loved it. If you just revise it a bit to take care of some capitalization, punctuation, and grammar issues then it would ...

Cool poem. I don't really understand the first stanza though - what's that all about? Also, the flow is a bit off. But overall I like it, it's really cool ...

Awesome poem. I really like it and I think you just need to go through and check the grammar and punctuation and it'll be even better :D Keep writing, Alzora

This is sweet and I like it a lot. Just go through check the grammar, capitalization, and punctuation then you'll be golden dahlin'. :D Keep writing, Alzora

Lives lived, and then they’re gone, days seem to crawl, but it’s a lie. You should put a break somewhere in here. We wish for things; think time’s too slow ...

a sentence I can't find , for the feelings deep inside my heart . Then add the break. I really like this poem. The emotion is very nice and the ...

silently . slowly . aware . Not solid anymore , you're see - through. Interesting poem. I didn't really get what it was about but I think the word structure ...

He left me such a wr e ck , Lost and alone . I had fallen off track . (What does this part mean? Did she fall off trakc with ...

Your hand grips onto my hair, (Took out the space between 'on' and 'to'.) Your hand grips on to my hair, Just like you really care. How does that have ...

Hearing "6742" down the halls ruined my self esteem. Huh? What's the number mean? My one chance, at my dream. Just one action is what got me (Took out a ...

But alone in society . Cutting away the flesh (I took out a comma here) You used to have . Alone and eternally cold . As if you never lived ...

A t ranslucent web drapes down, haunted with Secrets of a distant past. Here the spiders used to tread Freeing themselves from our world of dread. I like this line ...

I wonder if you’ll read this, I wonder if you care. I like these lines :) Soon, I’ll have grey hair. This is a kind of weird way to say, ...

Why can’t you just let yourself go? F orget about the past The first problem I had with it^ The other thing is that the ending isn't very final. Think ...

O_O You're just amazing. I would sit here and press the Like button for an hour if I could. I love this poem. I do believe it's better than anything ...