Junel

Hey there! Lovely story you have here. First the ever boring and annoying nitpicks: As he wandered along This is the second time you use wander closely, and this can ...

Hey there! I'm glad to see this continuing. First nitpicks: When Papa came home from the meeting at the church a few weeks ago and told us were moving, Jackson ...

Hey there! This is a great start to your story! Frist though the nitpicks: Ok, so you have quite a few run-onish sentences in your beginning I'll edit a couple, ...

Hey there, this is very intriguing and it really leaves me wanting to know more. First I want to get the boring nitpicks out of the way. (She doesn’t know ...

Hey there! Lovely story you've got here! First, the boring nitpicks: She doesn't cry and it's not the kind of person she is. I had to read this multiple times ...

Hey there! I enjoyed reading this, great job. First the ever boring nitpicks: It knows I only have one blast remains and I nearly missed this, but this sentence does ...

Hey there! Great start to your story! First the boring nitpicks: I'm pretty sure this is all in italics, and I'm left wondering why. Although, Italics are pretty they can ...

Hey there! This is a very interesting poem, with a unique message that you seem to have really thought about. In some moments I really believe that opening up and ...

Hey there! This is a nice little story, and I hope to help it get even better with my review. I'll try to keep this part short, but as the ...

Hey there! This is a great continuation of your story. Ok, so my first comment is that I didn't even realize that their mother was with them before this. Maybe ...

Hey there! This is a great start to your story. First, the boring nitpicks: rotting houses, and bitter citizens, and woods The bolded is unnecessary and messes with the flow ...

Hey there. This is amazing. The flow of your words makes it move quickly and made me want to read it again and again. It's so obviously heartfelt and raw, ...

Salut! I've been learning French for awhile so I decided to try checking this out to test my reading skills and I actually understood a good amount. I'm not sure ...

Hey there! First, let's get the nitpicks out of the way: especially if you were wanting to stay away from the This wording ruins your flow and just feels funky, ...

Hey there! Woah, this is really good am I'm seriously interested in your story now. Well first for the ever boring nitpicks and suggestions: This frustrated her. Queen did mention ...