What If We Bared Our Hearts

Hey there! It's ZeldaIsShiek here to review another quintessential piece of literature that made my day and win this Review Day by helping the Red Pandas stay in first place and reaching my goal of 80 reviews. I might even get to 100, if I work hard enough. I am really excited to review this amazing piece of art that you have created, and maybe add some witty humor as well. Anyway, that's enough idle chatter from me. Let's get into the review.

The meaning of this poem is very important to think about because it is very accurate. What would happen if we all expressed how we really felt and let everyone know if we were sad or angry? It would actually be quite liberating and would probably feel great. After all, who knows how long we have been keeping our emotions inside?

It is true that we try to hide our pain and our sorrow and that it would be easier to let it go, and I am glad that you wrote this to express this amazing meaning. Thank you for writing so neatly and making my day with this incredible poem.

That's all for today. Keep writing amazing literature that inspires me to read and review them, and have a great Review Day! Let's beat the Blues once and for all!

~ZeldaIsShiek

Hey there! This is a very interesting poem, with a unique message that you seem to have really thought about.

In some moments I really believe that opening up and showing what is inside can be helpful, but like Radrook exampled this is limited, somethings things stay hidden for a reason. Another thing I think is that no matter how we hope revealing those weaknesses may help us, there is always someone ready to use it against us. I think that definitely opening up to those we can trust and care for us is important, but to society as a whole, not always.

I think this is a great idea and an amazing start, but adding on to it, giving more specifics and even mentioning the times when this isn't helpful would strengthen your poem.

Overall I really enjoyed reading this and found it to be successful in making me think. I hope this review is helpful to you in your writing endeavors.

Sláinte -Junel

Thanks for sharing this poem concerning the need for humans to refrain from revealing their true selves to others. I enjoyed the read and it does raise a certain pertinent questions. Is honesty about ourselves at all times the wise thing to do?

I would say no it isn't. Why? Well, because there are times when revealing the inner self will proves detrimental to well-being. For example, would it have been wise for hidden Jews to consistently reveal their true identity to Nazis? Or for a person during slavery to have revealed her race when the person knew that imprisonment would be the result. Or during covert operations behind enemy lines.

In fact, even in the course of everyday life the revealing certain mistakes made in life would result in a reduction of admiration or respect. So wisdom demands that we refrain from doing so all the time. Hilary revealed her bad temper when she realized that she lost. Did that help her? In fact, had she shown her true self before that then she would have stood even less of a chance.

suggestion

I would qualify the collective pronoun, "everyone," and "no one" in reference to everyone wanting to speak their hearts with the modifier "most" or "almost".

The use of heart and soul"is considered a cliché.

Please excuse the formatting, when I copied it over from google docs, it messed up somehow.