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John Locke

  • Poetry » General, General Re: Not Myself

    My general impressions: I just didn't feel anything from this poem. The language seemed too overly complicated for a poem like this. I felt as though the words like "unmistakable" ...

    Thu Jan 10, 2013 5:09 am
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Symphony of the Streets

    I often hate reading short stories. Mostly because I cannot write them myself. However, you have written a very beautiful story and I applaud you for all but mastering the ...

    Thu Jan 10, 2013 5:04 am
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Freaks

    My reviewing skills are limited, my friend. I can only give you a review purely based on impression. I clicked on this poem because of the title. It drew me ...

    Thu Jan 10, 2013 4:59 am
  • Poetry » Horror, General Re: Control

    Although I am not a poetry reviewing master, I can give you my general impressions of this piece. This poem was very dark and strangely rhythmic. I felt a beat ...

    Thu Jan 10, 2013 4:54 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Other Re: Masquerade: Prologue

    This was a very interesting concept. Your writing was beautiful, however try not to slip into such poetic writing that your words lose meaning. Sometimes, you need to be blunt ...

    Thu Jan 10, 2013 4:44 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Narrative Re: Who are you? Are you nobody too?

    I wouldn't exactly call this a first chapter. You didn't introduce any characters. You didn't tell us the setting. You did not give us any plot detail. This seems more ...

    Thu Jan 10, 2013 4:33 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Chapter 0

    This is certainly a very thrilling opening. You have masterfully grabbed the readers attention by immediately introducing suspense and mystery. However, why not give this more detail and make it ...

    Thu Jan 10, 2013 4:27 am
  • Poetry » General, General Re: On Target

    I cannot give a masterful poetic review as some reviewers can. However, I am able to give you the general impressions I got from this poem. I am a lover ...

    Wed Jan 09, 2013 2:43 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Without Destiny: Prologue

    I applaud you, good writer. I have always found it ridiculously difficult to write in the present tense. It has angered me so! Because of this anger, I have often ...

    Wed Jan 09, 2013 2:33 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Teen Fiction Re: Sight Chapter 1/beginning

    Your writing is certainly very beautiful. There is no doubt or debate about that. However, with a novel, you have to be careful about using such poetic writing. I never ...

    Wed Jan 09, 2013 2:26 am
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Dead Flowers

    I cannot offer you a grand poetic review like some reviewers. However, I can offer my general impressions of this piece. I thought it was very beautiful. Your word choices ...

    Wed Jan 09, 2013 2:17 am
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Health Re: Time Slips Away

    This is a very interesting story. The subject matter was moving. The writing was simple, but to the point. I enjoyed the bluntness of it all. In this kind of ...

    Wed Jan 09, 2013 2:13 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Fantasy Re: Mystique

    I don't focus on grammar in my reviews unless specifically asked to, so I won't go into details about the mistakes in this piece. That being said, you need to ...

    Tue Jan 08, 2013 1:57 pm
  • Poetry » Mystery / Suspense, Horror Re: Beneath the Lighthouse

    I cannot give the intense reviews of a true poetic master, but I can give you my general impressions of this piece. I quite enjoyed this poem. It had a ...

    Tue Jan 08, 2013 1:46 am
  • Short Story » Realistic, Narrative Re: Stella's Owl

    This was very interesting and entertaining for me. I don't know why, but I enjoyed the blunt and to the point writing. You didn't dance around. You slapped me in ...

    Tue Jan 08, 2013 1:35 am


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