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John Locke

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Science Fiction
    Re: The Account of the Gods - Part 1 Chapter 1

    Hello, my friend. First, let me say that this is my first review in quite a long time, so I apologize for any slip ups, inconsistencies, or what have you. ...

    May 30, 2016

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: A Good Day for a Haunting

    Hello, my friend. First, an intriguing concept. I think with a bit of work, this could be transformed into an interesting short story. Second, some grammatical things: Overall, I would ...

    Jan 7, 2015

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure
    Re: The Master of Stanmoor - Chapter 1

    Hello, my friend. First, you have absolutely beautiful writing. The words were sonorous as I heard them in my head, flowing with such refined brilliance that I was honestly surprised. ...

    Jan 4, 2015

  • Short Story » Fantasy, Spiritual
    Re: The Pale Wizard

    Hello, my friend. First, a wonderfully gripping story. Your writing was incredibly rhythmic; it all flowed seamlessly together. You have an impressive talent for tight, intricate, and moving writing.

    Jan 1, 2015

  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, Action / Adventure
    Re: Hecate's Plan Chapter One

    Hello, my friend. First, I am glad to be reading your writing again. I had just read the prologue a few minutes ago, and I am eager to tell you ...

    Jan 1, 2015

  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, Action / Adventure
    Re: Hecate's Plan: prologue

    Hello, my friend. First, a combination of Greek mythology and Harry Potter? It is only my dream come true! And I apologize for reviewing this work. I saw your other ...

    Dec 31, 2014

  • Short Story » Narrative, General
    Re: Center of Circle of Life

    Hello, my friend. First, I must tell you that this is my first review in quite a while. I apologize in advance; I may be a little rusty. Having said ...

    Dec 31, 2014

  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, General
    Re: Love is Forever: Chapter 2.1

    Hello, my friend. First, I'm so happy that I get to read your work again! I did so enjoy reading the previous chapters. As you might have guessed, I have ...

    May 12, 2014

  • Short Story » Dramatic, Narrative
    Re: A night in hell...

    Hello, my friend. First, Welcome to the Young Writers Society! Trust me, you will enjoy your time here. But, back to your short story. This rather reminded me of a ...

    May 12, 2014


  • Hello, my friend. First, your writing is as beautiful and effortless as in the previous chapter. You know what you are trying to say and the images that you are ...

    May 12, 2014


  • Hello, my friend. First, I saw the later chapters of this novel in the Green Room. It is an absolute horror, of course, for works to reside in the Green ...

    May 11, 2014

  • Novel / Chapter » Narrative, Technology
    Re: Kinda Fruity Chapter One: Younger Years

    Hello, my friend. First, I saw that this piece had been lying in the Green Room for far too long. It is simply a travesty. On to your story itself. ...

    May 11, 2014

  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, General
    Re: Love is Forever: Chapter 1.2

    Hello, my friend. First, I thought that this chapter was a definite improvement upon the last. I could see solid characterization beginning to form, but there is always room for ...

    May 11, 2014

  • Poetry » Realistic, General
    Re: Ha gayyy!

    Hello, my friend. First, I agree with the reviewer below: there are a great many of these poems being written currently. However, we disagree on one point: I think that ...

    May 11, 2014

  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, General
    Re: Love is Forever Chapter 1.1

    Hello, my friend. First, I saw that the second chapter of this novel has a disappointing amount of reviews. Therefore, I am reviewing this chapter so that I may go ...

    May 11, 2014


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