Insomnia

Hey, Sam. :D Been looking forward to this... and now that it's here, I have nothing to crit. ;) Well, only one thing lol. She is temporary stunned, perhaps hypnotized ...

Hey Ratchet. :D This was a pretty good one. Made me laugh, anyway. Maybe I'm just easy? ;) You know, like Babe. You forgot your end speech marks there. :) ...

Hey... for what, the fourth time today lol? Just the one thing I found, and from the stuff I've done on your last chapters, you can probably guess what it ...

Turns out I missed a chapter... O_O That's a bit weird lol. Anyway, this was pretty good, I think it's the first I couldn't find any mistakes in. :) But ...

Come, on, let me touch you,” You don't need the comma after come. God, your so fucking cute,”. *you're You're turning into like, the queen of surprises lol! And I'm ...

Hey. :D Just home from school. It's my sisters 18th and i still come on lol. When your going up the stairs in the dark, *you're. I think you made ...

Hey Meevs. Okay, first of all : :shock:. Good twist lol, I wasn't expecting that. Threw me off a bit. :lol: “Why what for?” Should be Why, what for? How ...

Hey. Just getting a crit in before I go to school lol, and lucky I got such a good chapter. I only caught one mistake. He wouldn’t not come back ...

Hey, again. I think that I'm syaing that a lot to you lately lol! It seemed in my life that Rob was the centre of my life and I was ...

Hey. :) Just got on to quickly read the next part lol. Umm... just a couple of things here. I was opting for number two but Sappy seemed to want ...

Hey Nutty. :D I don't really have much to crit here, but that's probably because not too much happens. It was still interesting and helpful so we could see what ...

Well, this was good. It actually made me cringe a little when he pierced her lol. But i'm curoius about why Rob was sad. he got rid of his daughter, ...

Hey JC. I'm sure we've all missed POD while it's been gone. At least the wait is over lol. I didn't find any mistakes in this part. Your dialogue flowed ...

Seriously? O_O Another cliffhanger? You're killing me here. xD But this was good. I'm starting to imagine it like one of those soap opera tihngs where they always have the ...

Hey JC. :D Nice work on this. It seemed quite intimate, with the connection you built with the reader. I didn't find anythign wrong, but I just have to comment ...