Published April 1, 2007
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Hey, again. I think that I'm syaing that a lot to you lately lol!
It seemed in my life that Rob was the centre of my life and I was the centre of his.
You reapeated 'my' life there, and it made it sound awkward. Not that it's atcually wrong, but it just stood out lol.
dwelling up inside of me.
Should that be welling? Dwelling usually means lurking, but welling is rising. xD Either way.
I wont be back late
*won't
it would be a crazy axe murder who could hack me to death
*murderer, and lol!
Yet the person standing on the other side was definantly
I think that's definately, that might be another of those country things. xD
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side was defiantly not going to take an axe to my head.
should be definantly not defiantly. Your pieces keep getting better. There always seems less for me to correct each time. This piece lacked detail. There was less detail than usual, but it was still good. It's been a while since you made any mention to ice cubes.
These sections are sooo short *Cries*
I'm running out of ways to express my love for these, so I'm going to say now that I love all of this, and if I don't say so, it's to save myself from hackneyed praise.
-JC