ImHero

DarkKnight9 and Malachi I believe this was my review, thank you. You can do your reviews how you like and I will do them how I like okay?

Its really not that at all. Look at my other reviews I am unbias

So Baron you might see my review as being rude but it is not intended. I find I can get off what I actually wish to say better with no ...

This is jolly frances lol

This would be a good prose short story, you should think about doing that. -hero

At any rate I'll put my two cents in and say that ending it at "you are" will provide the biggest bang and the poem will stand for something. Right ...

check out bones on the side, I re-did this. Its not the symbolism that was confusing it was the metaphor... they are different things.

Nope, its not just you. I'll be working on it. It does have meaning but its just so damn hidden... thanks though.

Doesn't seem to different :P My big suggestions was to show us the story and not tell us about it, in first person. I think it would be cooler being ...

Yeah, removing them would be best. You should also think about taking out the repetition of the I fear me's but you would have to tweak it a bit to ...

I looked this up

Oh my gosh, I just re-read this and I'm afraid to count how many times I said rather. lol

cool

lol I get these sometimes.. its rather depressing and rediculas.

Charm jeeze why are you so harsh on yourself.. I was writing poetry for like 5 years and when I came to YWS I realized I still couldn't write good. ...