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  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Still Me

    Hey senzafine, this poem is rather vague, but charming. :) "Feel me as you never wanna see me" >Perhaps you might want to rephrase this with the missing modals. "Feel ...

    Dec 24, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Other Re: Cold flesh upon Steel

    *goosebumps* This is amazing. Just.....wow. I can only hope to write poems as good as this one day. There are a few typo errors though: "...the light of heaven vanishes ...

    Dec 17, 2014
  • Poetry » Romantic, Other Re: Over-Perfection

    Well, well...I love the energy and emotion you put into this poem. I could almost feel your youthful blood boiling as I read this. "Her beauty is such a deep ...

    Dec 16, 2014
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: On The Edge Of Bliss

    Hey there, just want to let you know that I LOVE this very very much. It's sweet and simple but eloquent. Not to mention, close to home. ;) You've phrased ...

    Dec 14, 2014
  • Poetry » Review, General Re: Bangladesh

    Overall a descent poem, but do consider the first four lines. 1. Bangladesh is not "beyond the earth", it's ON earth. 2. Of course it's far from the moon, it's ...

    Dec 13, 2014
  • Poetry » Romantic, Other Re: don't never hurt Me

    First of all, good job on the title :) I can clearly see how it matches the pattern of your poem. I like the concept of yes-and-no in this piece. ...

    Dec 12, 2014
  • Poetry » General, Romantic Re: Wake Up

    Hey there, my review will be split into two parts. One for technicalities, and one for my overall impression of your poem. First of all, let me commend you on ...

    Dec 12, 2014
  • Art » Horror, General Re: Her

    Hey hey, don't mind if I weighed in here :) I can't tell you how much the second line speaks to me...it's the personal pledge to go on even though ...

    Dec 11, 2014
  • Poetry » Spiritual, Dramatic Re: Where is God When I Need Him?

    Dear Gravity, idk if I'll be of much help, but I'm going to try. Let's just say I was experiencing the worst 2 years and 6 months of my life. ...

    Dec 6, 2014
  • Poetry » Horror, Other Re: She's gone

    I like the last line. My interpretation of that is that every pulse of breath is laced with depression. The recurring triads, however, (Depression 3x) states the obvious, and reduces ...

    Dec 5, 2014
  • Short Story » Realistic, Other Re: Wet in the Rain

    Haha....the first 3 quarters did not make sense to me until I reached the ending. Nice one (Y) Overall, a decent piece. My only suggestion is to refine and define ...

    Dec 5, 2014
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Self harm

    Sigh....this brings back many horrible memories of my past. But before I go into that, let me just say that this piece is simple and clear-cut but pretty wholesome. It ...

    Dec 5, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, Teen Fiction Re: "Taking Life"

    Ahhh damn this is good. Heh I'm wondering why isn't the title "Unfaithful Hypocrites" instead? :P Nonetheless this is pretty spot on. Could you explain to me why's the title ...

    Dec 4, 2014
  • Other » Realistic, Culture Re: End the "R-Word!"

    Thoughtful, but lacks maturity. As much as I completely agree with the content, and am also guilty for committing that crime, I think that this piece needs to stock up ...

    Dec 4, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Averting Asphyxia

    BEAUTIFUL. I love it. Was able to breathe in the essence of your poem in a single reading. Eloquent. However, I'd suggest replacing words like "trashing" and "deficiency" with more ...

    Dec 4, 2014


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