Young Writers Society

This is in fact short, but sweet. It is direct, but right to the point.
Love comes in all shapes and sizes, but you just have to wait. If you.are
Frustrated from not being in love, don't give up hope. God is preparing the perfect man for you and he will come in due time. All good things come to those who wait, always remember that. God will let you and your knight and shining armor to cross paths at some point and you will find my words to be true.

Hey there, just want to let you know that I LOVE this very very much. It's sweet and simple but eloquent. Not to mention, close to home. You've phrased the lines so beautifully; it is a delight to read. The essence of this piece does not only surface from the words you used but HOW you chose to use them. I too, am on the struggling edge of bliss. Basically caught in a tug of war between waiting, trusting God, and giving in to my impatience. Anyways, this is very good, keep it up. (Y)

Hello
Just scrolling around for poems. Man, I am thankful for finding this one! I really like it, very lyrical and poetic. I admire your choice of words and imagery. This poem honestly speaks to me, being more of a hopeless dramatic everyday.

You're meter was nice, even though it wasn't consistent, it sounded really good. Colorful topic too , of patience, waiting and yearning.

Just noticed that on your second stanza, 'it' is in the possesive case. So, it should be 'its'.

I really liked the last stanza by the way!
Continue to express! ^^

-Sybil (waltzingdreams)

It's not romantic love! It's only romance! And it's a fleeting thing, too.

Sigh. Oh well!

Romance, this feeling of excitement and mystery associated with a new love, the honeymoon phase of events within a relationship - what is it defined by? Is it the moonlit dates? Is romance the fleeting moment where eyes lock? Would you disagree and say, "No! Romance is the spark in the air! It's the electricity between our fingertips!"

Is it? Is it that spark? Be passionate! Answer! What -is- your most ideal picture of romance? You must have some idea (or else you wouldn't wish for it so terribly, wouldn't feel so "on edge" over it). Imagine this romance that has you singing, imagine yourself experiencing it, then write. As you finish writing, then you can add something like, "Oh, how I wish I could really have this!" You get a nice twist.

I'm sorry my review's a little lacking, but I hope this could help.

Hello!! *clicks the like button*.

I see that you are fairly new to this site and so, I just wanted to congratulate you on your star and your courage to have posted so much work!! Great job!!

So, I am going to take this stanza by stanza.

I really love the beginning stanza AND the title, as well! You are a great author!! It really dragged me into this piece!!

Now, the second stanza makes a lot of sense and I love how much it flows! Great job!! I love love love your wording and voice in this piece!

Well, the third stanza is great, too!!

The fourth stanza, I feel, has a rather weak ending but, other, than that, this piece could not be better!!

But, the only complaint I have is that the ending could have been much stronger. Also, that even though this is one piece altogether and is split by a star, the rhyming scheme is different in each one. Now, I am not saying to change anything because I like it the way it is.

All in all, though, you are a skilled and talented writer! Great job!! Keep it up!!

Keep writing!!,
~Tiff

This is simple and sweet and totally relatable. I am right in the same position, I've come to just accept that it's not my time yet. Not going to lie, when I read the summary I thought this was going to be full of depressing teenage angst but thankfully I was wrong because that is such a drag urggh.

The line, 'Come that time this that spell shall break' sounds really odd. It took me a few times to actually read it right and it still came out sounding weird. You might want to rephrase. But that is all I'm going to nit pick

I specifically liked the line, 'To climb to it's summit and maybe higher', it sounds very romantic - like love makes even the impossible possible :')

I also like that the first line and the last line are the opposites of one another, it makes the piece seem very rounded and complete - I don't know love but when I find it, I'll know.

As I said before, it's a lovely piece.

Well done!