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It was meant to be night disguises. I didn't notice that typo. Thanks for the reveiw! (:

Nice job! Though, I hope you find some way to enjoy this Christmas. It's the season for joy! Try to think positive! Good job writing this!

Drama? The main character will see the error of her ways? Maybe she will become ambitious, and tries to claim the throne? Maybe she's a little young. But that would ...

Lol, you have successfully made me laugh. I have no criticism.

Thanks for the reveiw! I am horrible with title names! Thanks for the suggestions!

Thanks for the reveiw! I had a friend in first grade named hendrix, and didn't know how to spell his name

I think this could really go somewhere, and I want to see more. But what it's missing is detail. The boy goes from crying to simply accepting in sentences. But ...

I was envisioning the poem the entire way. You painted a clear picture in my mind, and I loved it. However, you were occasionally redundant, like, the last three sentences ...

Sorry for being all over the place, I kept going back to the poem for details, and kept going back and forth between pro and con. Sorry

I can relate. One-time in class, it was so boring, and nothing important was happening, so I just day dreamed. Lucky, too, cause that's how I got my idea for ...

Oh, forget number three, I missed the fact he knew what he was doing.

Oh, and I forgot to say how much I relate to that last line, "when I'm gone they will know, who I was, and who will follow" that's one of ...

You did a really good job with the wording. The rhyming was well done too. The only thing negative thing is that at the beginning, you used tale twice. It ...

I enjoyed it. I found it intriguing. Though, I found the part where they crashed a little confusing, maybe it's just me. I found it good, over all, though.

Loved it! It was so good, I wanna read more! The words flowed. And throughout it, I was imagining the words in my head. Amazing job.