Joyful, exuberant, and full of spirit,
You make my energetic soul sing.
Slow, somber, and lovely in lyric,
You carry me on soft angelic wings.
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Swiftly, loudly, you consume my mind,
Your tumultuous emotion rages.
Groaning and weeping you won’t leave me behind,
Comforting me as you spill off your pages.
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Your numerous faces endear me to you,
Your rising and falling leave me entranced.
You’ve always been there and will always be true,
And I will remember how you made me dance.
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For multiple faces can often be bad,
But yours all remind me of times that we’ve had.
Okay I must say.....I for one absolutely love it. The words you use are very lovely, and I especially love the line "Groaning and weeping you won’t leave me behind,Comforting me as you spill off your pages." Absolutely beautiful. This simply flows off the page in a very elegant way, the rhythm is excellent a long with the flow, I actually don't have a lot to review in this one, but that doesn't mean you can't improve. You can always improve.
Hi wafflewolf7!
I really love this masterpiece! The way you used your wording, emotions, and metaphors, is FABULOUS!
Keep on writing!
~Liberty500
(P.S: Please write another one!)
This is really good! I like how you explored the metaphor of the song and showed how songs can help you see things different in your life and affect your emotions, because it is very true that songs affect your emotions and change your perspectives. The only thing that I didn't quite understand were the last two lines "For multiple faces can often be bad,/But yours all remind me of times that we’ve had." Maybe clarify those a little more? Maybe it's just the way I read it.
Excellent and keep up the good work!
Hi there!
This is really, really good! The only thing I would change is when you say "Angelic wing" I would say "Wings." To me, it fits better with the rest of the sonnet.
My favorite part:
"Swiftly, loudly, you consume my mind,
Your tumultuous emotion rages.
Groaning and weeping you won’t leave me behind,
Comforting me as you spill off your pages."
You are really, really good! Keep it up!
Loved it! It was so good, I wanna read more! The words flowed. And throughout it, I was imagining the words in my head. Amazing job.
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