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Its good. The wording was intresing, and it was humorous, however It could do with some added length. If it had that, it would make a excellent children's book. There ...

This was a very interesting short story. The wording was good, and if you ever decided to make this a novel (Which I understand if you don't.) Then there is ...

Great story! Lets get the negatives out of the way first. So, throughout the story, you used phrases like, "She heard" or, "She felt" There called filter words, and they ...

It was really good, and I think it could go somewhere. However, -There were a few grammer issues, you might want to go through it again and check for that ...

I can relate. You wouldn't catch me dead in makeup. I'm not that pretty. Great poem! It's really good. No changes needed. It's from the heart. And it doesn't feel ...

Amazing, this poem just made my day! Incredible job. If making your readers laugh was your goal, you have succeeded. (I feel really bad for the janitor though) I have ...

It was very interesting, it reminded me of Hansel and Gretal, there were a few things in it that could be tweaked. In the first paragraph, you tell us that ...

This was really good. I liked how the two characters interacted, however, The opening was kind of confusing, I didn't know if the bodies were human or not, I assumed ...

Scary... But good writing! There is two problem I have with it, The wording was occasionally awkward. Also, "then the gun was in my hand"? I had thought it already ...

So the story seems interesting, but there are a few problems, You have us loads of info really fast that could have been giving to us more naturally been given ...

So, you did a great job showing the characters feelings, however, there are a few things you can work on. 1. Lilly calling herself evil kind of makes her less ...

I found it very interesting. I like the fairy pun! The Description was good too. However, There's no mention of the headmaster name. I found that odd. Also, all pets? ...

You did a good job describing the characters feelings, but there were three glaring issues I had. 1. The wording was a little awkward, like, "uncomfortable but comfortable" ? And ...

The ending made me read it again. It surprised me, to say the least! Though, I didn't see much rhyming? Maybe it's just me, but it's super satisfying when a ...

I find the idea of a talking dog interesting. It has a good hook. There are only three things that bother me. 1. We learn Roy's name after we learn ...