It was the last period of the day and by god,
I had to go!
My bladder itself was dancing to and fro.
It was a common dance, the shimmy and squeeze
Known at its best for when you need to pee.
I raised my hand high and waited promptly to ask
“Please, oh please, I need to go bad!”
The teacher looked me over, no life in her eyes
“It’s only ten minutes to wait, surely you’ll be fine.”
I bit my lip and nodded, my bladder truly sad,
But really ten minutes couldn’t be that bad!
Yet when five had passed, I found it was something I couldn’t take
So I raised my hand again - that was a mistake.
“May I please go, I really can’t hold!”
The teacher just simply shook her head no.
So I did the obvious, the only thing to do
(Let’s just say I could feel it dribble on my shoe)
There was a gasp, then laughter in the room
The teacher was furious, even darker with gloom.
So I opened my mouth, like I had before,
“I’m sorry, Mrs.Teacher, but I had to go.”
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Hi lemonayyde!
I've never had anything like this happen to me, but your poem made me feel like I knew how this felt! I liked your rhyming choices. The contrast between the teacher and student is really good. It's great how it was obvious what happened at the end, but you didn't say it exactly.
This is my very first review - I just joined today!
-ThomMLP02
Well, thank you for doing your first review on my silly little poem! I'm glad you enjoyed it, and welcome to YWS
Woah! That poem really just made me fall of my seat! I was laughing so hard, that my little sister came to me and asked me if I was mental! XD
I really like it very much!
Keep on writing!
~Liberty500
I'm glad you liked it! Thank you so much!
Amazing, this poem just made my day! Incredible job. If making your readers laugh was your goal, you have succeeded. (I feel really bad for the janitor though) I have nothing to say about what you can improve, because it is already one of the best poems I've ever read! Keep writing, you've got a real knack for it.
Happy Holidays!
Oh, wow! Thank you so much! I don't do poems very often because I always felt they weren't very good, so this means a lot to me!! Happy holidays to you as well!
Hi there. Okay, first off, I am shaking with laughter!! This is a great success! I just read it to my mom and we are both laughing! This isn't going to be much of a review, because I don't have anything to point out and no tips to offer, so I'm sorry for that. I am looking forward to more humorous stuff from you! The world definitely needs more people like you, ones who can make someone laugh without even trying.
Thank you for what you bring to the world!
Thank you so much!! I'm so glad that you enjoyed it and it got you to laugh! Everyone can use a chuckle now and then
I couldn't agree more.