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Awesome. You did wonderful on this introduction, and i love it. You used a technique I called a hook and sinker technique. This technique to me is only good when ...

I loved this story! It was funny and made me laugh. I loved the sibling fuss there made the story feel more real. You did have one or two mistakes. ...

Awesome chapter right here. I loved how you had killer suspense at the end. My heart is pounding and racing trying to figure out what will happen next. Brilliant cliff ...

I get to give the first comment up here,cool. First let me say welcome to YWS, and I hope you will continue to write, like this because this is truly ...

Hello again, I just read what Carlito, a fellow reviewer had said and I will say, this could be realistic as well. I mean its four years into the the ...

Hey Tigeraye I loved this chapter. You are an amazing and gifted writer and now I want to read more. Your thoughts was well put out and the chapter flowed ...

Lol, Tuesday just like chapter one of this story I love chapter two. You did a great job with the plot twist to. The whole time I thought Billi was ...

Very interesting, I was able to read it from start to finish with relative ease. Which means there was little to no mistakes in this paper. I do feel like ...

Hi, there I will say the end got me, and I love this little short story. But I think you could have made the ending a little more twistful. Just ...

Okay, so there is a horned creature going around eating other creatures......lol already intrigued by you concept Tuesday. Well So far you do have a couple of mistakes with wording ...

Okay, so is this your version of how man came to be about on earth??? If it is I have to say I love it. I like writers who differs ...

Lol, very interesting, poem caterpickel. For a first poem I will say your pretty good. As I read I got a pretty good picture in my head which means you ...

Good job on this Tues. I love your colorful words and you gave the main charter one thing I believe we human beings are being to lack......Imagination. Imagination, believe it ...

Well, this is definitely your work ms. Creativity......and If I must say your mind has once again sent my heart racing as I was over whelmed with fear and terror. ...

Well I can defiantly say this story is bit less hitting off like the other two stories I read by you but never the less it still has your creative ...