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Hey there, maventemple. Welcome to YWS! I'm here to review your poem and provide suggestions on where to go from here. First, let's talk about style. I felt like, phrasing ...

Hey there, ChocolateCello. I'm here to review your awesome poem. Today I'll mainly be focusing on syntax, phrasing, and vocabulary. Ready? Set? Go! Content: Let's start with the first stanza. ...

Hey there, Ankush! Welcome to Young Writers Society. I hope you enjoy it here--you're certainly an excellent writer. Let's get started with the review, though, shall we? Content: Amphitheater. First, ...

Hey there, NicolMemo! First of all, I think this is a big improvement over “Haikus’ Time”. Your juxtaposition is stronger and your linguistics are more powerful. I think, at this ...

Hey there, Chaser. I agree with Mysticalxx. This /is/ a thought-provoking poem, and I think that's its purpose. It's, I think, a commentary on how our society views displays of ...

Hey there, Ikrantsyip! First off, this sounds quite exciting. You should definitely post the chapters on here. Lots of YWSers add them in installments as they write--you'll find we're an ...

Hey there, Mystical. Here to share my two cents. I think both of these are impressive, considering they were written by a ten-year-old. I'm not going to share any specific ...

Hey there, roeckercody! Just a few nitpicks... one per stanza, in fact! By the time you receive this letter, I pray that things will get better. Okay, so I like ...

Hey there, Noldor! Just a couple of quick suggestions. I really don't understand school. I'd make this past tense because the rest of the poem is in the perfect past. ...

Hey, mayuri. First of all, from the title I'm assuming these are your feelings. I'm sorry if you're unhappy or depressed or scared, and I hope you feel better. I ...

Hey there, herbgirl! I'm back to review this lovely piece. In this review, I really want to focus on formatting, and how to use it to your advantage. So, right ...

Hey there, herbgirl! Time for a short review. I want to look at this as a whole, instead of dissecting it. When I read this, one word comes to mind: ...

Hey there, roeckercody! I can't wait to review this one. In this review, I'll be suggesting three areas where I think this poem could improve. I think you're an awesome ...

Hey there, speakerskat. Time for a serious review. Content wise, I have no issues with this. I think it's endearing that you wrote this for your boyfriend as a joke, ...

Hey there, mounika! I can't wait to get into this. I have three things for you to think about when you write in the future--they're quite general, but I think ...