Hannah

Ahhhhh, super EXCELLENTLY lovely intent behind this poem that will only be heightened with revision and further thought as to presentation. The first stanza, for example, might as well be ...

Wooooahhh, some big formatting problems here. DiskElemental is right that if you clean it up, you'll have a better chance of getting views. Especially since it's only about the fourth ...

I am just going to say quickly that if it was your intention to build a terrible relationship, that's what you've done. First the girl doesn't care what the boy ...

Firstly, watch your diction very carefully when trying to construct something that feels ageless and epic. "Got it wrong" is a very modern-feeling phrase and shatters whatever you'd built before ...

Hehe, because I can't resist using this word now that I realized it's a cloud pun, this needs to be condensed and then expanded. You've come to the heart of ...

I think this is a good exercise, but I'm wondering why you've posted it here. If you don't want it reviewed, why have you offered it up for reviews. On ...

Hey! You're the writer! You're supposed to bring the scene to life for us. Don't tell us to go off to Google. Describe chin chin to us in the way ...

First of all, I don't know what place this came from within you, so I don't want to offend, but there is almost nothing original in this piece at all. ...

Wat. Okay, I am going to say how I interpreted it, because my admiration rests on the fact that my interpretation is correct, because if not it's just confusing and ...

Hey, this is mostly well-executed, but the parts where it stumbles really bring down the whole piece, so we need to fix it up and let the FOOD APPRECIATE FLOW! ...

You need to get deeper for this to have any real impact. As it stands, it's a shallow evaluation of a short life span of humans. On top of that, ...

Okay, the one thing I have to say is that although I understand the desire to get this in before review day, it's no excuse for giving us a shoddy ...

Hey, girl! First, I know the image works, but if someone were to think a little harder about it, all edges of the city are the furthest sides. Cities are ...

Hey there! I am glad that you started this piece, but where's the rest of it? What happens next? Does she really move? Does she get to visit Anastasia? Did ...

The sky was overcast, but I could still make out the cloud edges, the weather would improve. ^ this is the place where you need a semi-colon, as the second ...