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Hannah

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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Beautiful Disaster

    So vague! So vague! It's one thing to give a vague push in a direction and let the reader puzzle it out for themselves, and it's another thing to be ...

    Jan 23, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Courage

    Did you discover something while you were writing this poem? Did you come to an end point that felt for you like you fulfilled something for yourself? I feel like ...

    Jan 23, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: ashes

    Hey, Coral. You should message me if you want to, 'cause I don't know if you actually want to, but if you do you should~ Now, I love that you ...

    Jan 23, 2013
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Harmful When Swallowed

    on your wedding day, though it's a good thing my uniforms are white There's not a lot I want to change about this, Audy. You're my style, or at least ...

    Jan 23, 2013
  • Poetry » General, Dramatic Re: The Better Men

    It totally made perfect sense. It was absolutely clear to me what was going on here from the beginning, but I think you circumvented it too much to really get ...

    Jan 23, 2013
  • Short Story » Realistic, General Re: The Creek

    Here are some things as I fly through the first time: looked like a forest from the classroom amazon books. Reading this through as it is makes me think the ...

    Jan 23, 2013
  • Short Story » Horror, Other Re: Story of Apple Anne

    Hahaha, oh my gosh! What a mean mom. Like she just tricked her daughter into eating another apple? When her daughter probably trusted her 'cause they grew up together? I ...

    Jan 23, 2013
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Don't Worry Be Happy

    Yup, it's a big problem that your poem revolves around a questionable usage of the word "sappy". Sappy, to me, usually seems pretty happy. Like, people who are being sappy ...

    Jan 23, 2013
  • Poetry » Review, General Re: Goodbye

    I know that feel! I know that feel! Ugh! Step moms. D: But, wow, after reading your replies to other reviews, I don't feel like I really want to post ...

    Jan 22, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Supernatural, Mystery / Suspense Re: Lightning Royale Chapter - 1

    Quick impressions on the first read through: maybe it wasn't his very best time, clearly. How can it be "maybe" and "clearly" at the same time? He let himself enter ...

    Jan 22, 2013
  • Other » Romantic, Narrative Re: Tribute to Seth

    This is obviously very close to you, so I wonder what you want to get out of posting it on a forums for reviews. What is your direction with this ...

    Jan 22, 2013
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: love

    Hey there~ It would be cool if you edited this into formatting, but the rhyme makes it easy to see where I think you'd have put linebreaks anyway, so I ...

    Jan 22, 2013
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: Deleted

    Magpie, this is super and brilliantly gorgeous for the most part, but there are two sets of lines that I just want to cast out altogether. You bring texture, motion, ...

    Jan 22, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Removed

    This is the spark of something gorgeous. I think there's always something gorgeous, for me, in personifying celestial bodies. We call them bodies for goodness' sake! But you gave it ...

    Jan 22, 2013
  • Poetry » Romantic, Lyrical Re: What An Odd Little Star.

    I like it. I think it could be even better, but I first want to say that I like it. Second, I want to ask why you wrote this in ...

    Jan 22, 2013


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