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Re: Beautiful Disaster
So vague! So vague! It's one thing to give a vague push in a direction and let the reader puzzle it out for themselves, and it's another thing to be ...
Jan 23, 2013 -
Re: Courage
Did you discover something while you were writing this poem? Did you come to an end point that felt for you like you fulfilled something for yourself? I feel like ...
Jan 23, 2013 -
Re: ashes
Hey, Coral. You should message me if you want to, 'cause I don't know if you actually want to, but if you do you should~ Now, I love that you ...
Jan 23, 2013 -
Re: Harmful When Swallowed
on your wedding day, though it's a good thing my uniforms are white There's not a lot I want to change about this, Audy. You're my style, or at least ...
Jan 23, 2013 -
Re: The Better Men
It totally made perfect sense. It was absolutely clear to me what was going on here from the beginning, but I think you circumvented it too much to really get ...
Jan 23, 2013 -
Re: The Creek
Here are some things as I fly through the first time: looked like a forest from the classroom amazon books. Reading this through as it is makes me think the ...
Jan 23, 2013 -
Re: Story of Apple Anne
Hahaha, oh my gosh! What a mean mom. Like she just tricked her daughter into eating another apple? When her daughter probably trusted her 'cause they grew up together? I ...
Jan 23, 2013 -
Re: Don't Worry Be Happy
Yup, it's a big problem that your poem revolves around a questionable usage of the word "sappy". Sappy, to me, usually seems pretty happy. Like, people who are being sappy ...
Jan 23, 2013 -
Re: Goodbye
I know that feel! I know that feel! Ugh! Step moms. D: But, wow, after reading your replies to other reviews, I don't feel like I really want to post ...
Jan 22, 2013 -
Re: Lightning Royale Chapter - 1
Quick impressions on the first read through: maybe it wasn't his very best time, clearly. How can it be "maybe" and "clearly" at the same time? He let himself enter ...
Jan 22, 2013 -
Re: Tribute to Seth
This is obviously very close to you, so I wonder what you want to get out of posting it on a forums for reviews. What is your direction with this ...
Jan 22, 2013 -
Re: love
Hey there~ It would be cool if you edited this into formatting, but the rhyme makes it easy to see where I think you'd have put linebreaks anyway, so I ...
Jan 22, 2013 -
Re: Deleted
Magpie, this is super and brilliantly gorgeous for the most part, but there are two sets of lines that I just want to cast out altogether. You bring texture, motion, ...
Jan 22, 2013 -
Re: Removed
This is the spark of something gorgeous. I think there's always something gorgeous, for me, in personifying celestial bodies. We call them bodies for goodness' sake! But you gave it ...
Jan 22, 2013 -
Re: What An Odd Little Star.
I like it. I think it could be even better, but I first want to say that I like it. Second, I want to ask why you wrote this in ...
Jan 22, 2013
