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  • Poetry » Realistic, General
    Re: What a waste of wings!

    Hey Leela, I shall try to review you since I feel like reviewing and your work caught my eye! I won't drag anything on longer than I should so here ...

    Apr 26, 2017

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: My Fading Starlight

    Okay time for a review thingy! First off, before I likely look overly critical, I need to say that I loved they idea of this poem and the tone of ...

    Feb 15, 2017

  • Poetry » Romantic, Satire
    Re: How to build a heart

    I like what you did here and I felt this was great humor for Valentines day. I do feel there are improvements that could be done though. I am not ...

    Feb 15, 2017

  • Poetry » General, Supernatural
    Re: if not for you

    I would like to say from the start, I loved this poem and I personally found it beautiful. So I am not the best reviewer but I will try my ...

    Feb 7, 2017

  • Poetry » Spiritual, General
    Re: Exhaustion

    Okay, I enjoyed your poem quite a lot, however I need to state this first: You really ought to add punctuation and separation into stanzas because it was fairly easy ...

    Dec 13, 2016

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Eternal Garden

    I liked your poem, it was cute and told a nice story. I have a few suggestions though. So first off, I agree with ElvenJedi about your rhyming, even though ...

    Dec 11, 2016

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Wicked

    I liked the poem and I can see aspects that made this more personal. I would like to give you a little friendly criticism however so here we go! First ...

    Dec 8, 2016

  • Poetry » Realistic, General
    Re: The never-ending word....

    I liked this poem however I found it hard to follow along. As far as criticism, there are a good few things to say but Ill keep it simple. First ...

    Nov 29, 2016

  • Poetry » Mystery / Suspense, General
    Re: beauty in the beast

    I really enjoyed this poem as I love the theme. However I would like to make a few suggestions and point out a few errors. Try adding proper grammar and ...

    Nov 9, 2016

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Winter's Demand

    I enjoyed this poem a lot, I liked the interesting theme of it (At least I thought it was). As far as criticism, there are only a few suggestions I ...

    Nov 9, 2016

  • Poetry » Spiritual, Other
    Re: Transcendence

    I loved this poem personally, although I have to state I am not the best critic. However I would like to suggest the use of commas and periods to separate ...

    Oct 25, 2016

  • Poetry » Narrative, Lyrical
    Re: basophilia

    This poem was very enjoyable, great work! The only issues I saw were in two lines and some capitalization. "let you mouth part like a ripe pomegranate" "but you nails ...

    Oct 21, 2016

  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic
    Re: Scars

    As repetitive as this was, the meaning this poem had was very moving. As different as each persons lives are, everyone could relate to the message at the end of ...

    Oct 18, 2016

  • Poetry » Romantic, General
    Re: Mosaic Love

    Hey I wanted to let you know I really enjoyed this poem! I would like to point out a few things you could improve however: For one, you could try ...

    Oct 17, 2016

  • Poetry » Narrative, Dramatic
    Re: The River

    This poem was very enjoyable! The theme of this poem was quite meaningful and it remained consistent throughout the whole poem. I would like to give some advice for this ...

    Oct 13, 2016


Il faut imaginer Sisyphe heureux (One must imagine Sisyphus happy).
— Albert Camus, The Myth of Sisyphus