Heya, Sayantan! Casanova here to do a review for you!
The first thing I'd like to say is that I liked the message behind this poem, but I do have a few things I'd like to point out.
The first thing is the bold. It's hard on the eyes when so much is used, and I'm having trouble understanding the significance of it in this poem. I could understand a line here or a line there in bold, but the whole poem was confusing in that way.
The next thing I'd like to point out is the apparent rhyme scheme. It doesn't flow well, nor does it seem to be consistent. I would suggest cutting it. And here's an example-
Looking at someone who doesn’t care
No one for...
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Here the first line rhymes with the third line. Yet here-
The disfigure shows the case
Tuppence response by the race.
The rhyming switches to where one line rhymes with the next one.
Anyway, the overall message of this poem was decent, but I did feel like it lacked imagery and could use some tweaking in the rhyme zone. I think that's all I have to say on this one, and I hope it helped.
Keep on doing what you're doing, and keep on keeping on.
Sincerely, Matthew Casanova Aaron
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