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  • Lyrics » Lyrical, Romantic Re: Whats wrong?

    Hey there, 1234 is here with a very short review perhaps an extremely short one. Okay, let's jump to the review straightforward. The repitition played a great role in your ...

    Feb 14, 2021
  • Poetry » Romantic, General Re: lovelines

    Hey there, 1234 here to provide you with a very short perhaps a precise review. Ok so let's jump to the review. like river water vapor in a February freeze, ...

    Feb 14, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Science Fiction Re: Ch 1 - Out of Sight and Out of Mind

    1234 is here to provide you with a very short(precise) review. So, let's start. I liked the story so much. I have a mere confusion that why the last man, ...

    Feb 14, 2021
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: True Love

    this was a great one. That you are more than words can surmise i think surmise is not the proper word here. you could have used any other word such ...

    Feb 13, 2021
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Never again

    no. i couldn't resist myself from reviewing it. although I am not having that time, but I will try to provide you with an honest review. well, i was quite ...

    Feb 13, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Mystery / Suspense Re: Sky of Seasons Chapter-1.1

    ok. first come to the mistakes- Yeah every season, now don’t disturb me. Let me finish the tale of the Sky of Seasons.” said Opa, the grandpa of Ethan and ...

    Feb 13, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Chapter Two: Air of Mystery (Olivia's POV)

    let's first figure out the mistakes- four friends and his two parents. i think omitting the word two will be helpful. only parents sound better. i can't find any grammatical ...

    Feb 12, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » General, Teen Fiction Re: The Other Side: Chapter 4: Missy (Excerpt)

    As usual, you have nailed it. time for a few mistakes, Sorry, I’ve just been really losing track of dates recently. really seems redundant here. consider removing it. “Do you ...

    Feb 12, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Other, Realistic Re: Squirrel and Juniper Trees: Chapter 4

    ok. so let me find some mistakes of yours- "I don't believe you. You don't really have a pet squirrel, do you?" really seems unnecessary here. "It's okay. I forgive ...

    Feb 12, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » Horror, Other Re: Surviving the zombie apocalypse as a highschooler Day #2

    first of all, it's actually a very good piece. now, let's come to the small mistakes- "He's pissed Elle!" put a comma before Elle. 'i dont want kids' it should ...

    Feb 11, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » General, Teen Fiction Re: The Other Side: Chapter 3: Harvey

    ok. so time for some tiny mistakes- Just savour what it's like to be in love…. you get me? i think you should put a 'do' before you. it sounds ...

    Feb 11, 2021
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Narrative Re: The woman with no name

    awesome. I have a few confusions. let's come to those. Body left there to rot All was left Was Her innocent Plot . what do you want to mean by ...

    Feb 11, 2021
  • Poetry » Narrative, Realistic Re: Claire and Dianne

    ok. as you asked for the grammatical errors, let's come to it first. there are a few errors I could point out- Cursing uncontrollably,from all the pain there will be ...

    Feb 11, 2021
  • Novel / Chapter » General, Teen Fiction Re: The Other Side: Chapter 2: Missy

    at first, let's figure out some mistakes- There’s no point trying to be normal is there. this line is not clear. please make it clear. The multi Grammy winning manager, ...

    Feb 11, 2021
  • Article / Essay » Literature, General Re: The Bubble

    this article or essay, whatever you say, is awesome. the concept of a bubble is so good. there are a few mistakes I would like to draw your attention to- ...

    Feb 11, 2021


One by one they went / And, though each laughed as he returned to earth / Their souls were in their eyes.
— Alfred Noyes (Watchers of the Sky)