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  • Poetry » Romantic, Dramatic Re: Red Roller Skates

    This is a great poem. I love the metaphors you use to describe things. One of my favorite lines is "that float up the cracked dirty highway, to the gates ...

    Aug 29, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Shakespearean Sonnet #3 (Brick Edition)

    Wow. I am blown away. When I read your description I was thinking to myself: "How can someone write whole poem about bricks. This will probably suck." Well, you have ...

    Aug 26, 2014
  • Other » Humor, General Re: Funny Punctuation.

    This is very clever idea. I like how you tied everything into the main subjet of puns even though the examples were just examples. One question of something I didn't ...

    Aug 26, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Baby Girl

    This is very powerful in a way that it's hard to put my finger on. I love your description on everything and how you mention all of the different awful ...

    Aug 26, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, Other Re: Ocean

    I love how, when you wrote this poem, you have a nice tone. It's not really telling a story but more so, just saying. It's very blunt and to the ...

    Aug 26, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: Chapter One Out To Sea

    I find this story interesting. You clearly have a wide knowledge of boats and this almost reminds me of Moby Dick. But I think that Moby Dick was one of ...

    Jun 9, 2014
  • Script » Culture, Technology Re: Data Mining: How is your data being used?

    This is very interesting! I liked how you were informing in an entertaining way. This isn't much of a "story" but more of a documentary or something like that. There ...

    Jun 9, 2014
  • Short Story » Dramatic, General Re: Robbery

    I really like how you described this situation. It would be really scary and this creates a very nice image of what is going on. One thing you might want ...

    Jun 9, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Fantasy Re: Among The Twinkling Stars; 3.1

    Hey there! I'm here for another short review. There was one thing I thought could use some editing. So I get that she wanted to find Kimberly and is the ...

    May 31, 2014
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Silence

    This is a very deep poem I like your repetition "Silence this is what I crave, this is what i need." Though there is a grammar error though. In "This ...

    May 29, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Fantasy Re: Among The Twinkling Stars; 2.3

    Here we are again. I love this story! One thing though. When "I" pulls the trigger, it seems like an overreaction. I mean, I see where you're coming from. Someone ...

    May 29, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Fantasy Re: Among The Twinkling Stars; 2.2

    THis is a great story and I read the first one so I get what's going on. I must say though, there is a Kimerly issue here and there. First, ...

    May 29, 2014
  • Short Story » Realistic, Narrative Re: Just An Average Girl

    This is beautiful. I love how you said the thing about describing the stranger through a mirror. This hardly seems like a story in comparison to a heartfelt talk from ...

    May 29, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Fantasy Re: Among The Twinkling Stars; 2.1

    This is incredible. I love the rome you use in your writing. It's one of those thing that you can't describe what you like about it. Kinda like how if ...

    May 29, 2014
  • Poetry » Narrative, Dramatic Re: A Bad Poem For A Bad Life

    This was a very heartfelt poem. I can tell you put a lot of time and care into it. My only criticism is that it is very unclear what your ...

    May 28, 2014


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