Firepower13

Oh... It's sad when you think about it, isn't it? That poor girl... But anyways, aside from the emotional hit of such a short poem, which was stunning, by the ...

Hello! First name Fire, last name power13, here to give you a review! The tenses in your story are muddled up. That was the absolute first thing I noticed. It's ...

Hello! I don't watch Attack on Titan, although I'm fairly sure it is anime? Not positive, however. So my review may be just a little skewed by my lack of ...

Hello! My immediate impression of this poem was that I could relate to it, which is very important, especially in a somewhat abstract piece like this. I travel a lot, ...

This is beautiful. I'm a supporter of the LGBTQ community, and I love to see things like this. Restores my faith in humanity. Sad as it is, I'm required to ...

Hahahaha! Nice, I never even thought about that. Poor logos. So, nitpicking time! The first line is italicized, but the rest of the poem isn't, which looks a little weird. ...

Cute! So, all I want to point out here is that I honestly can't tell where the sentences begin and end. You don't use any periods, so I have to ...

Oh, this is nice. I totally feel like I can sympathize with the main character. I myself am a bit of a daydreamer, and a lot of the things you ...

So, no offense, but this is sort of very hard to read. Probably the biggest problem is that there are no paragraph breaks. It looks like KatGirl already rewrote the ...

Okay. This is interesting. However, you are plagued by run-on sentences. Fear not, for you can conquer them with mighty semicolon. See? "We are not perfect, we are the Tronlin ...

Very powerful work here. I like your style. It's very simple, but also captivating. So, I would usually yell at you for repeating the word truth so much, but in ...

This is pretty interesting. It made me think about life for a moment. Anyways, your rhymes are really good. My favorite was other and brother. I just have one thing ...

Your format, as others pointed out, is awesome. I also really appreciated some of the rhymes in there, like dazed and amazed and flow and glow. Basically, it was pretty. ...

Hmm. I like the idea here- they are a gang that kill people, but you add a unique twist onto it with the masks and animal themed names. I didn't ...

Oh, I like it! I'm going to have to go back and read the other chapters now. But anyways, I have a few questions. This story is written in diary ...