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Hello, BookWolf here for a review!
You did an awesome job of describing the journey home. I found that I could relate with this a lot, and I loved the words you used. Everything seemed to flow VERY smoothly, and my favorite part was the second stanza. 
I really liked everything about this poem, you are obviously gifted and I would love to read more from you.
Keep writing, this was great!
Wow, this was really great!
Sorry this is short, but there is really nothing I can correct that hasn't already been said in the other reviews.
~BookWolf
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Well done! I really enjoyed this little poem because you have managed to ask a great question about something that - at face value - doesn't seem very intriguing. But you made it intriguing! That's what I love about it. As poetry is very open ended, there weren't very many legitimate mistakes I could find, except for this one;
"the world home itself almost needs"
Reading it over, I believe you meant to say "word" instead of "world"
All in all great job! I already told you that I loved it, so all there is left to say is keep up the great work!
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My immediate impression of this poem was that I could relate to it, which is very important, especially in a somewhat abstract piece like this. I travel a lot, and I can totally understand what you are saying here, and you are saying it in a very poetic and pretty way.
So, with grammar, what immediately jumps out at me is a lack of capitalization. If I were you I would capitalize the "I"s at the very least.
The poem itself, especially the first and second verses, seems to ramble a bit. It's a bit hard to follow, but it could imagine his being done on purpose to support the central theme of the piece, which is traveling.
In conclusion, very nice work. You chose a great topic to write about and did a good job on it.
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The lack of capitalization is completely and totally intentional. Poets sometimes chose to forgo capitalization, and in this case I didn't want any words to be more important than the others. You have to decide for yourself what the focus of the poem is.
There might be a first person narrator, but that narrator isn't the important part.
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I believe it should say flown?
The world home doesn't quite make sense. I suggest that you reword it.
The last stanza is amazing! It's basically a sweeter version of the definition of home. It's my favourite stanza by far.
Your poem is really good, it captures the whole idea of travelling away from home, and how in a sense the whole world is your home (is that what the line was saying?). Great job!
Thank you very much! I'm terrible at catching typos.
It's really interesting to hear your interpretation, because that's not actually what my intent was xD My intent was more how sometimes "home" as in the place you live isn't always home in the place you feel most yourself and enjoy living in. So there needs to be a word for "the place I'm only here because I don't have any place else to do" and a word for "the place I love living in and chose to go to".