The Cat and the Video game

Hey there,
Okay I must say that this is hard to read without the paragraphs being separated but other than that this is a very cute and entertaining story. I ust wanted to say that even though there is room for improvement you have a good talent and with some work you could really improve.
Great job and keep writing!

So, no offense, but this is sort of very hard to read. Probably the biggest problem is that there are no paragraph breaks. It looks like KatGirl already rewrote the story for you so it looks more appealing, so I don't have to do that, but I would really like to drive the point home. Use them paragraph breaks.

The idea is pretty cute, and I can tell what it is just by reading the title, but it's hard to follow because I can't tell where one paragraph ends and another begins.

Hello! I see that you have no paragraph breaks, which you must remember is a top priority. I would like to correct it for you just so that you can see the difference. I saw that you used the word 'fun' in here. I suggest searching up 'define fun' on Google and synonyms come up. If I can't think of any, that's what I usually do. Instead of 'thing' use object. It improves your story and makes it more strong. When you use quotes, actually use quotation marks. Don't use these marks: ' '

The cat looked over the balcony of its home and inhaled the air. Today was a great day to explore. The cat smiled and leap down from the rail; scampering off in search of its owner The cat wondered into the living room and tilted its head in confusion as he saw his owner laying in an awkward position in the chair with a weird shaped object in his hands. He looking interested in the TV. The cat meowed to get his owner's attention. "Come on, lets go outside. It's such a sunny, wonderful day." The human kept looking at the TV and making grunting noises and moving the weird shaped object in his hand. The cat meowed, frustrated with him. His owner had never ignored him before. What could be more important than him? The cat meowed again in jealously.

Soon the cat felt his human’s hand touch his head. He purred and butted his head into the human’s gentle touch but as soon as the touch was upon him, it was gone. The human was back to whatever he was doing. The cat hissed softly and looked toward the TV to see what was so interesting. The cat meowed in confusion. What was on the screen looked like smaller versions of humans that seemed to be fighting each other. The cat pawed the TV in bewilderment.

The cat huffed and jumped onto the chair where his owner was and sat on the arm chair and watched his human. The cat meowed glumly and made his way down into his owner's lap, pawing the weird shaped thing in his hand. This finally seemed to get his human’s attention. “Hey there, buddy.”

The cat meowed happily. His owner had finally spoken to him. “Want to play?” The cat tilted his head as the human put the controller in front of him.

The cat looked at his human in puzzlement. The cat then looked down at the strange item and pressed a button. The human on the screen kicked the other human. The cat meowed, a small smile appearing on its face. He decided to press another button, and this time the human punched the other human. This was exciting to the cat.. So this is what had his owner's attention! He meowed fiercely and started to use both his paws to press multiple buttons.

The human that he appeared to be in control of started kicking, jumping and punching all over the place; landing hits on the other human. Finally the cat heard a loud K-O and the game ended. The cat meowed, satisfied with himself. This seemed way more interesting than going into the front yard. He wanted to play more. He felt his human pet his head and then slide down his back.

He purred strongly and stood onto his back legs to nuzzle the human’s neck. He heard the human laugh and pet him more. His human was so loving and fun. He loved his master. He wanted to play with his human more. He pulled away from his human’s hand and meowed loudly while looking at him, and then looked towards the weird shaped object. His human smirked and went to the room. He soon returned with another odd object. “Let’s play buddy,” The cat meowed excitedly. He recognized the word play. He raised his paw to his human and they gave each other a high five.

He and his human sat on the floor. His human had the weird shaped thing in his hand while he had his on the floor. Soon the game started. “Fight.” The cat started to press the buttons meowing strongly and the human chuckled, doing the same. Cat and human played a video game together--now that was something to see!

Alright well, there's a lot to be done here, but don't get discouraged! The first thing I'm going to recommend is paragraph breaks. A new paragraph should be started every time someone starts to speak or when the subject of the passage changes. For example, it might be something like this:

"This finally seemed to get his human’s attention.
“Hey there buddy.” The human said. The cat meowed happily. His human finally spoke to him today. “Want to play?” The cat tilted his head as the human put the controller in front of him."

Another thing to remember is that if there are two independent clauses in a sentence, you should separate them with either some kind of punctuation or a connecting word (and, so, but, etc.). The first sentence, for example, should look something like this:
"The cat looked over the balcony of its home and inhaled the air. Today was a great day to explore."
If you decide to use a connecting word instead of punctuation, be sure to put a comma before the connecting word, which would make it look like this:
"The cat looked over the balcony of its home, inhaled the air, and knew that today was a great day to explore."

I think that you would also benefit greatly from expanding your sentences; most of them are very short and choppy, and it interrupts the flow of the story.

All in all, I think you are going to get much better, and that you should probably look into getting someone to help proofread and/or edit your works before they're posted/published. I give this a 4/10; the story and idea is cute, but the writing quality needs to improve.

Try not to get discouraged; keep on writing!