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Re: Abused
Hi there! I really love this piece. Very original point of view, and very well-written. It was brief, but also created a good story. There weren't any grammar mistakes I ...
Apr 4, 2016 -
Re: The Case of the Missing, um... Missing stuff
Hiya! Fire here for a review :) :) I like your idea here. I think it's relatable to a lot of people, when someone takes their belongings without permission or ...
Mar 17, 2016 -
Re: Childhood Horrors Revisited
Hey there, Fire here! This story is awesome. Seriously. I love the transition you have from just kind of reminiscing on this old story, to actually almost becoming the story. ...
Jan 28, 2016 -
Re: Fake is the New "Beautiful."
Hi there, Fire here! I really love what you're saying here. You address a problem that's much to prominent in society today, and I love that you did it in ...
Jan 28, 2016 -
Re: How is a writer's personality?
Hey there! Welcome to YWS!! I'm Fire, and I'm here to give you a quick review on your piece here :D So first off, i would remove the spaces between ...
Jan 22, 2016 -
Re: Demons
Hey ChocolateCello! I really liked this poem, very short but very powerful in feeling. I love reading short poems like this because I suck at reviewing poetry and these poems ...
Oct 2, 2015 -
Re: Extinct Water. (we really need to save water, especially now) I like writing feature articles, so, I am hoping for anyone's advice!!!
Hi there! Welcome to YWS! I like the topic of your essay, but I did see a few things you could change. There was a spot I saw were all ...
Sep 23, 2015 -
Re: The House on Laurel Hill
Hi again! So first off, great imagery here. I can't really say much about it, but know it was very well written. The ending and beginning were also very good. ...
Sep 22, 2015 -
Re: Open Wound
Hi there, and here as requested! :3 First thing: I loved the metaphor at the beginning. It's a really good way to begin your piece. The second sentence, I know ...
Sep 22, 2015 -
Re: You are an Ocean
Wow, that was a twist ending! I really like the entire piece, and I honestly have nothing to critique. You have some beautiful imagery here and you can really get ...
Sep 22, 2015 -
Re: The Old Centurion of Rome
Oh wow, I really loved this. Your detail and writing was beautiful. He remembers nights he spent with his troops, fighting men and frostbite alike. I loved this sentence. It ...
Sep 21, 2015 -
Re: How to Visit Etherworld
I really enjoyed this! This idea would make a really good book if you wanted too. :3 What really caught my eye was your summary. "DO NOT TRY THIS AT ...
Sep 21, 2015 -
Re: A Walk In The Woods
Hi there and welcome to YWS! I'm going to dive right in on this. I like the idea of this story, so far it has a good amount of detail. ...
Sep 21, 2015 -
Re: Fallen
Hi again! I'm here to review as requested! First off, I love the idea for this story. It's very good, but there were laces where you could use a little ...
Sep 21, 2015 -
Re: Penguins & Peacocks
I loved the topic of this story! It's totally relatable for many people, including myself sometimes. This first sentence was a great start. It really drew me into the story. ...
Sep 19, 2015
