Childhood Horrors Revisited

by Mazuurek

Published January 27, 2016

E - Everyone

In Short Stories

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When I was a kid my parents rarely told me any stories. Maybe it’s because they were Christians and pragmatic, but the most common tale I heard before bedtime was “Have you finished your homework and studied yet?”

So naturally I took to my friends and cousins for the juiciest tales.

An early tale I remember, perhaps the oldest, is one a friend told me around Halloween. Of course, I was young and impressionable back then, and the story naturally stuck, but when I look back it really does feel a bit absurd. Then again, stories back then mostly were.

It starts off with a taxi driver making his rounds at the witching hour, driving down a lonely cemetery road. By some stroke of fate he encounters a passenger, a mysterious young woman dressed in black whom he can’t see properly in the rearview mirror. She directs him to a cemetery nearby, and when he turns around, lo and behold – she’s a skeleton. And naturally, the story ends with the clichéd, “And he was never seen again.”

Yeah, it’s pretty absurd. But I guess most stories had to be to impress a kid.

Looking back on it, however, the story isn’t particularly wrong. People are afraid of death, so what better way to play on those fears than to have a skeleton pop out from behind you? Of course, I reckon that as people grow older their exact fear regarding death begins to change. It goes from fearing their own deaths to fearing the deaths of others. I mean, we’re not here forever, are we?

So think about that story again. Imagine being a taxi driver driving down a lonely cemetery road at 3am. You’re middle-aged, in a midlife crisis. You live alone. Your friends and family have alienated you. By some stroke of fate a young lady flags your taxi down.

“Where to, madam?” you ask as she comes in.

“Do you know where cemetery three is at?” she asks, her voice wavering.

You know, but the alarm bells in your head are beginning to ring. Still, you drive her there – you need the money anyway. Throughout the five-minute drive you try to catch a glimpse of her face in the rearview mirror, but she purposely keeps it hidden from you, leaning against the door. Her dress is a deep black. When you reach the cemetery you feel a chill run down your spine.

“Can you wait here for a short while?” she asks. “Just five to ten minutes.”

You nod silently, and she gets out of the taxi. As you see her walking away, deep into the cemetery, you feel an urge to just drive away, but you’re paralysed with fear. You’ve heard this story before, way back when you were a kid.

After eight minutes she returns.

“To the nearby train station, please,” she says. Her voice wavers even more. On impulse you turn on the lights in the taxi and look at her. Nothing out of the ordinary, but her eyes are red from crying.

“I’m fine,” she reassures you, and you begin driving. It’s silent for the first few minutes, but then she begins to speak.

“Frightening, isn’t it?” she mutters.

“Sorry?” you ask, puzzled.

“To think that the people you love may just die someday,” she continues.

“Ah, yes,” you don’t quite follow her.

“It’s scary that people can just disappear like that,” she seems sad. “But you know what’s scarier?”

“What?”

“That some people don’t seem to care, or even worse – they forget.”

Your thoughts return to your estranged family.

“My grandmother died a couple years ago,” she explained. “Every year I would visit her grave and put flowers, but then this year, yesterday – I forgot. I've been so caught up in everything that it didn't even occur to me. It was only at midnight that I remembered. And I even forgot which cemetery she was buried in.”

She heaves a sigh. You are nearing the station.

“But at least you went to her grave eventually,” you reassure her.

“Thank you," she accepts the consolation, "but I still feel horrible for forgetting. No one should forget, right?"

You don’t reply. You stop at the taxi stand.

“Are you sure you don’t want me to send you straight home?” you ask. “No extra cost.”

“It’s fine,” she says, offering you a fifty-dollar note. “I need time to think. Keep the change.”

And with that she gets out and walks away. You don’t drive away, however – you stay there at the taxi stand, alone, thinking in silence, until the dawn begins to break and your shift ends and you go home.

Frightening, isn’t it?

Comments & reviews · 3
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Amnesia
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Amnesia wrote a review Review · Jan 31, 2016

Hey there, Mem here for a review

First off I love the way you did this story, it kinda turns on itself.

Obviously there are some flaws here

For instance I don't like how both stories kind of meld together. maybe adding a bit of transition in there will make it sound less choppy and more smooth.

Another issue with this work is the sentence

And with that she gets out and walks away.


You aren't supposed to use "And" as the beginning in a sentence. Most English teachers actually say this at the beginning of 8th or ninth grade.


you stay there at the taxi stand, alone, thinking in silence,


should be

"you stay there at the taxi stand, alone, and thinking in silence"

and you could definitely add on to this sentence.

"thinking in silence about what just happened."

That's pretty much my only nitpicks with this story

Although it has flaws it shows promise and I look forward to reading more.

~Mem

I'd like to point out that the Chicago Manual of Style indicates that there is no problem in starting a sentence with conjunctions like "And" or "But", and that the only reason why people are taught that it's wrong in early English education is that children tend to overuse it.

Your second point makes sense, but I was going for a more fragmented feel in the sentence. Technically speaking the grammatically correct way to write it is "You stay there at the taxi stand, alone, and think in silence."

Thanks for the review!

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cpedro
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cpedro wrote a review Review · Jan 31, 2016

Hello Mazuurek, here for a review!
This piece is rather life thinking. It makes you wonder and ponder through your own emotions. To think for once about the death of others and not your own, as you so very well mentioned. It's a simple scene and yet so well constructed because everything about the background and setting of the scene plays with the theme of the story. The sadness from the cemetery and even the fact that it happens by night time works very well to enpathize the theme of death.

In it's onw way and to a more detailed way your story also portrays a criticism to humanity because it criticizes the selfhisness and conceited feeling people have, thus leading them to forget about others that are no longer here and to even pause a little time to spare a thought for others.

Congratulations on your beautiful piece and hope to see more.
Keep writing!

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Firelight
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Firelight wrote a review Review · Jan 28, 2016

Hey there, Fire here!


This story is awesome. Seriously. I love the transition you have from just kind of reminiscing on this old story, to actually almost becoming the story. I looked, but I honestly didn't find anything wrong with the story. It flows nicely, all your grammar seems correct and it's overall written very well.


The topic of the story is great, and I love the thought it kind of leaves you with in the end. I give this story five stars!

Keep writing!

~Fire



It’s not unorthodox, I thought it was beautiful.
— Jimi Hendrix