FancyDragon

HEYYYYYYY! So great job! I lovee the word choices and flow of the story. It's really pretty. I am still not sure the message you are trying to get across ...

Interesting short, I love the concept and ideas in the story. You should go over the story because there are some miss spelled words and awkward sentences structures. It is ...

Okay, great job I love it. It's pretty and has a touch of sorrow to it almost grim and dark. I think adding punctuation could help the flow a bit ...

There are a lot of interesting phrases and word choices but there are some awkward sentence structures disrupting the flow of your poem. 'so smeared it was in blood' this ...

Haha Well done it captures a wonderful simplicity and effectivly getting a point acrosst. It is a odd prefrence of mine but i like that puncuation. Th flow was on ...

very thought provoking. I really like your themes and your diction. You chose some very interesting words and phrace set up. That being said I am nt sure but the ...

Very good. It is a chilling relationship sounds like a game of tug-a-war almost. I love the simple imagery. I can picture a woman standing over a child telling them ...

Wow. This is why I love poetry. The word play and flow can't be beat. Now not to be nit picy but the first line 'rose may be red'. That ...

Okay there is no auto correct on this thing I am typing on, so I am sorry. Now peaces of poetry like this is why I love poetry. It flows ...

haha not to start weird right off the bat but the third from last line. Since I'm not here, I think here should be there. I agree with some of ...

Fancy here xD Well damn. This deserves a follow. At first i was not sure as to what was happening are what the point was but once you get to ...

LOL Dragon here Tag You're It xD No no i like it. If you add some words or take out some words to make it flow better. like the second ...

HEY Fancy here! xD haha Wow, powerful. Alot of interesting words used. The style was great and refreshing! There are some weird lines though that disrupts the flow. So maybe ...

Aaaaaaaah wow lol Fancy here. Well it started sweet cute and caring then you get to the end and aaaaah that was sad haha But it is great! The flow ...

WOW lol i love it the description the imagery and the word choices! It flowed beautifully, i love how you ended it, too! I really don't have much to say ...