Esmé

I've never read an english translation of "Lolita" ( nor any other, lol, I'm finishing the polish one). -Though polish and russian are simillar, aren't they? For now I can't ...

Quote: The elf and the dwarf stared each other in eye. ‘Eye in eye’? I’m not sure here, though, I was never good at such expressions… Quote: “I have to ...

Quote: Roku had kept his pace for three days with no food or rest and Tairen was at the verge of collapsing. Don’t you think ‘while’ would be better than ...

Quote: while he’s screaming at the audience I scan at first 10 rows looking for a certain red haired girl….but I cant find her. ‘While’ should be capital. ‘I scan ...

Yeah, I agree with Phorcys. This is way too short to write a critique. quote: Angrily, she sent him to box shipment, the worst job there, where he packed boxes ...

I’m a bit tired, so sorry if I omit any mistakes. I’ll be making corrections as I read, here it goes: Quote: Uhm… I can’t find anything to correct. Wow. ...

I am a bit tired - sorry if I miss some mistakes and if some of my comments seem a bit brutal. In your first paragraph, you have wolf too ...

Quote: Once there was a queen, her kingdom was falling. Her mind, going. Her friends and allies gone. All she had left was her ambition. That was all that could ...

Yeah, I agree on the present time issue. After that, I have nothing to say, with th eexception that I liked your writing. Follow angels suggestions, ad it will be ...

Are you writing this just to get points? Huh... Get a life, kaolin. Please. As to the script, I think its good (sry for the bare term, but I'm not ...

ELEIN lol. Since it's already here, I'll make a critique. a) Format (how I hate that word.)= spaces between paragraphs. Quote: Watching all the little lambs from below, he wondered, ...

I personally do not think eragon was that good (no offence :)) I just din't like it that much. I read boh parts, though. As to your writing... My poetry ...

I agree with Crysi and everyone before me. If you post something, make sure it is decipherable. You expect us to read it, you expect us to make a critique ...

Firstly, format (spaces between paragraphs, that is). quote: I came alive when someone comes inside but they see me for what I have become, a shell; then they are gone ...

Probably all your mistakes have been pointed out, so I'm not going to repeat anything. I just wanted to say that I liked it xD, even if at times it ...