Epicdonkalous

Hey there! To begin, I do like how you set up the analogy/example/comparison that thoughts provide nourishment. That being said, I think there is a lot of room for improvement. ...

Hey there! Interesting concept. I semi-guessed the message of the poem through the title, so nice job choosing a title. I like the first sentence a lot, but nerd seems ...

Hey there! Um, I guess the concept is okay? Sorry, but this is very poorly written. To start off, your title - "Mithila Penting" - I thought maybe it was ...

Hey there! Intersting concept. I've always wanted to see some work on schizophrenia. You presented some interesting ideas surrounding it, so congrats on that. Unfortunately, this needs some improvemen

Hey there! To start off, I like your first sentence. It made me wonder what the narrator was excited about. I did find a few things I'd like to address.... ...

Hey there! This was nice - I'm surprised, I'm not a fan of romance. This is very sad, but something I feel a lot of people face. Being rejected, ignored, ...

Hey there! HIV/AIDS stories can be powerful. Unfortunately, I thought this was extremely typical and poorly written. I think you should go back and proof-read this. You also need to ...

Hey there! First off, I was pleasantly surprised. As I was reading, I had no idea where you were going with this. When I read "The minute his hand brushed ...

Hey there! Ah, the ever trending topic of teen love. x3 On to the review! First off, you said this was a poem, but this format is not reading as ...

Hey there! Wow. So I really enjoyed this. I thought it was well written, and had that serious edge to it without being that stereotypical "dark" "deep" angst poem. A ...

Hey there! So good job. You made me smile. That's quite a difficult task. Anyway, I absolutely hate rhyming poems, but enjoyed this. I'll admit, at first, this poem was ...

Hey there! Well, I enjoyed this. I think that it got to the point, without being excessive and stereotypical. I applaud the fact that you are only 13, and can ...

Hey there! I always love a good parody, especially Disney ones. I like how you chose Snow White, considering she is so well known. On the downside, I didn't find ...

Hey there! Well I do like the concept, though I find that this poem has much to be worked on. I think you could have been much more original. Also, ...

Hey there! To start off, very nice concept. Slightly dark, without it being mental-asylum scary. I am not one for rhyming poems, but this doesn't bother me. I did find ...