Miles away from the glare of the city in an area 'Mithila' by drawing a picture of the guys were making some direct cross streak. Born from the same acts' Mithila painting which identifies the world today. Who knew it would become an abstract painting.It Pulls to the whole world of its own identity.
"Mithila Paintings" developed in a province of India 'Mithila' (which is located in Bihar). It is used since ancient times. The USP of this painting are created without the aid of scaleand the Painting grooves and the balls are created by drawing hands. It is an extraordinary painting. Just as grooves and provides scenic views of the collapse.
“Mithila penting” is famous in foreign tourists especially in Chinese, Japanese,Gallic and Englishman. Due to its popularity, this ancient art is still alive. Due to its popularity today is being made in India, including China and Japan also. India incoming tourists come specifically in Bihar to see it. Here they also get a chance to see India's oldest and the world-renowned university 'Nalanda University' and Related information in the Buddhist religion.
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Alright, hey there sushantshubham, Louis here to review.
I must agree with Epix, at first I thought 'Mithila Penting' was the name of a woman or something. Turns out you just misspelled 'Painting' and forgot to add in 'the' at the beginning. 'The Mithila Painting' would have been a better title.
Secondly, the concept is okay, but the spelling and phrasing kind of ruins it for me.
Alright, what? Phrased like this, I understood something along the lines of two guys cross-country trekking away from a city named Mithila. I really don't understand what you're trying to say here so I can't help you, I'm afraid.
I'm sorry, what? I'm not sure what this means in English, exactly. That 'acts' doesn't need an apostrophe... I think, and I'm... fairly sure there should be a question mark after 'abstract painting'... 'Pulls' probably shouldn't be capitalized. I'm very uncertain here because this is so badly written I can make not heads nor tails of it.
Again, what? Maybe you mean The 'Mithila Painting' was developed in a province of India, Mithila, which is located in Bihar. That's more organic and makes sense.
I think you mean 'scale and' there. The space is important. Also 'painting' shouldn't be capitalized there. Plus it should be 'painting's grooves.'
I think you mean it's a famous foreign tourist attraction. The painting isn't a tourist itself, now is it?
I'm sorry, what? The painting is being reproduced? Isn't that like, illegal?
So yeah, I think I've made my point clear. This does indeed seem like a bad advertisement, and needs a lot of work to be passable. But you can improve!
Hope this helped
~Ita
Hey there!
Um, I guess the concept is okay? Sorry, but this is very poorly written. To start off, your title - "Mithila Penting" - I thought maybe it was a person or place. I would never have guessed you meant "painting". Now, your first sentence "Miles away from the glare of the city in an area 'Mithila' by drawing a picture of the guys were making some direct cross streak." is full of confusion. I feel like there is supposed to be some connecting words or phrase in between "....in an area 'Mithila'" and "by". Then, it's as though you tacked on some random words at the end.
This entire thing seems as though you copied it from a bad advertisement.
"Born from the same acts' Mithila painting which identifies the world today. Who knew it would become an abstract painting.It Pulls to the whole world of its own identity.
Alright, where is the connection? This is in pieces, it doesn't flow nicely. What is before "born from the same acts" ? What does it have to do with the painting? Now if you are posing a question, you need a question mark. I can't really edit your sentences to make sense, as I do not know what you were aiming to achieve. Check your punctuation and grammar.
"Mithila Paintings" developed in a province of India 'Mithila' (which is located in Bihar). It is used since ancient times. The USP of this painting are created without the aid of scaleand the Painting grooves and the balls are created by drawing hands. It is an extraordinary painting. Just as grooves and provides scenic views of the collapse.
Wait, what? What is used since ancient times? Are you saying 'mithila paintings' is a style of painting? You need to clarify this. ".....without the aid of scale. The painting grooves and balls are created by drawing hands." The last sentence seems like it should be part of another one. Also, what is the "collapse" ?
“Mithila penting” is famous in foreign tourists especially in Chinese, Japanese,Gallic and Englishman. Due to its popularity, this ancient art is still alive. Due to its popularity today is being made in India, including China and Japan also. India incoming tourists come specifically in Bihar to see it. Here they also get a chance to see India's oldest and the world-renowned university 'Nalanda University' and Related information in the Buddhist religion. "
Okay, now I'm even more confused - what is "penting" ? Did you mean painting or am I missing some crucial information? Also, why would this be famous in tourists? You become redundant later on, there is no need to use "due to its popularity" again, especially after using it the sentence right before it. You also repeat China and Japan.
Overall, this needs so much work. Please review the entire thing and edit it to make it smoother. Keep writing.
~ Epic