The Reverse Knight In Shining Armor Complex

Hey there!

Interesting concept. I semi-guessed the message of the poem through the title, so nice job choosing a title.

I like the first sentence a lot, but nerd seems kind of harsh - was she just playing around when she said this? (I'm assuming she did, but still) It kind of seems like being all "you are a nerd" is a bit....critical. Then again, I'm being pretty nick-picky. ;D (That should tell you something about your writing)

I agree with the previous review of how "I never knew she would have indigo eyes, and long, dark hair, pulled over her left shoulder when she's shy, or nervous, or flirty." should be broken up - it seems kind of long and bulky, and it makes me have to re-read it to absorb the information - again, I'm being nit-picky.

With the line "I never knew she would love dance, and music, and children, and my old, ripped up jeans. ", I don't think all the 'ands' are necessary. It seems sort of like he forgot something and just tacked it on, so just try commas, and one and, maybe?

I don't really care for "a little girl" in the sentence, as I think of a 10 year old (somewhere around that age), and it changes the whole meaning of the poem. I see how you covered your tracks with "a young woman, really", but still.

I like the last line, though it leaves me curious. Actually, I think this entire thing could be a short. As the first reviewer said, I would remove her name, or use a nickname, her first name, something more personal.

Overall, nice!

~Epic

Hi there!

I just want to say that I was very intrigued by the title of this poem. And I really liked it. It's got a nice flow to it and the message is great. I really enjoyed it.

She told me once that she never knew her knight in shining armor would be a nerd in ripped up jeans. Yes! Victory for the nerds

But...
I never knew my knight in shining armor would only be five feet tall.
I never knew she would have indigo eyes, and long, dark hair, pulled over her left shoulder when she's shy, or nervous, or flirty. I feel like you should break this up into two lines. Maybe break at 'and long, dark hair'. That way it's not such a long line and the form of the poem will still stay the same because you'll have another long line.
I never knew she would love dance, and music, and children, and my old, ripped up jeans. Same thing with this one. Maybe break at 'and children'.

And...
I never knew my knight in shining armor would be a little girl (a young woman, really) <-- I love this part. I'm not really sure why, but it's cool. It's like the speaker is just saying this off the top of his head and then all of the sudden he realized he said the wrong thing so he throws in an extra thought. with a song in her heart, illness in her blood, and a delicate silver cross always fastened firmly around her neck.

But, I guess...
I never knew I needed saving until Anna Faith Campbell became the love of my life I really don't think you need to put Anna's name in here. If anything, just put her first name. But I think it would go with the rest of the poem if you just said 'I never knew I needed saving until she became the love of my life'. I think it would be good to keep the identity of this girl a secret. It makes the reader wonder. Even though we don't know Anna, there's still an image created in our mind and it may not be the same image once you put a name to it. Make sense?